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We got in the car and took off for a drive

 

and in a couple hours we finally arrive

 

from the central valley, all the way to the coast

 

to that quaint little town, of which I often boast

 

the sun excites your skin as it burns away the blues

 

the update on your Facebook says it came from Santa Cruz

 

a place is so laid back that you just start to melt

 

takes the sting off the wounds from the hands that you’ve been dealt

 

there becomes a gentle calm when you’re sitting near the ocean

 

enchanted by the salty breeze baste in seaweed soup and suntan lotion

 

the Boardwalk beckons with its bustling park

 

it’s beach front concerts playing after the dark

 

memories start flowing from my inglorious youth

 

a window to the past blurred by fantasy and truth

 

late night beach bond-fires-- with coolers of beer

 

the stars put on a show as breakers crash in your ear

 

on big laid out blankets we explored our desire

 

and then traded tall tales over the crackling fire

 

long summer days baking out in the sun

 

where the golden tattoo adorned everyone

 

football, swimming or exploring the cliffs

 

wine coolers, egg rolls and Bob Marley riffs

 

sitting on a bench as my kids play in the sand

 

I felt an angel’s tear gently fall on my hand

 

the sky covered over and the air became cold

 

I can’t figure out when that boy got so old

 

as we loaded the car and buckled ourselves in

 

my eyes filled with tears and I started to grin

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

very beautiful quality to this Dan. i loved the ending. get misty eyed happens to me all the time and i usually grin too. i get a day dream feeling off of this but at the same time this feels like real events. enjoyed this immesley.

 

victor

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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Hi Dan, I love the sentiment of the poem and the reference to Facebook gives it a current touch. I think the story evolves fluently but the rhymed couplets seem to chop it up a little for me. I wonder if you retained the rhyme but tried different line breaks... Just an idea.

 

I enjoyed this revisit to Santa Cruz, been there many times.... Spring Break baby... That is where we went OOOOOOh so many decades ago.

 

~~Tink.

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