Upside-Down

[JoelJosol]

This is where uncertainty drops me off.

Normally, on highways, in daylight,

signs and landmarks are discernible.

But, this evening, the news is terrible.

 

Now, try to understand this fact

of ship captains angry with weathermen.

Who wants to sink an expensive ship?

The SSS chief voted anyway with her health.

 

It could be global warming is making things

unpredictable. Soon, the wind will blow colder

and colder until the air-con is turned off.

Hey, is not that a big hump on the road?

[Aleksandra]

Hm Joel. This poem sounds enigmatic and so deep. I like how you wrote the start of the poem and then all other verses. Loud poem and good expressed .

 

Aleksandra

[JoelJosol]

Hi Aleksandra, it is another way of writing about the sea tragedy in my country.

[goldenlangur]

Hi JoelJosol,

 

The first two halves of the poem flow like ruminations of the narrator - perhaps listening to the news as it's relayed or perhaps reflecting on recent events - one gets an impression of the narrator trying to make sense. Then this final line has the effect of the narrator coming back out of the reverie:

 

"Hey, is not that a big hump on the road?"

 

I find this line - the image and thought here quite intriguing:

"The SSS chief voted anyway with her health."

 

And wonder what could it mean?

 

 

 

goldenlangur

[JoelJosol]

Hi GL, it is sort of political poem. The expensive ship is an allegory of the political state and the SSS chief is the recent news item of resignation due to political differences with the present administration. Due to the economic slowdown, "big hump", it is fated like the recent capsized big ship.

 

I am trying to learn a different way to write. Hence, my recent poems lack the cohesive narrative but the key words and symbols offer hints in its midst.

[tonyv]

I like your new style, Joel. You forgo the narrative and give the reader a balanced mix of literal and more profound associations. I like how you involve the reader.

 

Tony

[Bloodyday]

actually i lost in this para:

 

Now, try to understand this fact

of ship captains angry with weathermen.

Who wants to sink an expensive ship?

The SSS chief voted anyway with her health.

 

something is dropping in last line.

 

But the issue is now a wrold wide concern. poor country like ours will suffer the most but who cares!

 

thanks for depicting a ggod subject!

[JoelJosol]

Thanks, TonyV. I'm trying my hand on this new way of writing.

 

BD, the last line is a reference to a political act by a key government agency.