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Where does it Go?


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The click and the clack of the clock,

.. cleverly creeps up on the corpse

......... in the coffin.

 

 

Just a thought to break up that alliteration a bit.

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Hi Danielle, Love the sound but I am with Badge on this, it needs line breaks. The 17 word poem is very close to haiku and elimating a couple of articles would bring the syllable count in line. (just an idea)

 

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