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The Fall


JoelJosol
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The letters still feel solid. Not better, just the lid.

If you knew change, like earth shifting, the range

of collapsing infrastructure is called attraction.

 

Anyway, the rubble keeps things away from a blue sky.

Just put a sign on top. She is 'Love'. But, I am

so transient. And quick. Majestic.

 

Next, the sun comes out to burrow into thick clouds.

Who is proud of this new light snapping in the brain?

In the end, shadows covered the details of the fall.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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goldenlangur

Hi JoelJosol,

 

Excellently worded write, this! One gets an impression of the natural phenomena reflecting the poet's feelings and thoughts - the "shifting, transient," and "shadows" seem to suggest how difficult, agonizing and beyond reach. even futile, it all seems - perhaps an allusion to how articulation of feelings for a desired one can be just that and moments for happiness and fulfillment fleeting and shattering.

 

Or i could be barking up the wrong tree!

 

But loved the way you've woven the words seamlessly here.

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Aleksandra

Joel I agree with GL. Very nice written piece. I love how you dragged out this part of your poem:

 

Anyway, the rubble keeps things away from a blue sky.

Just put a sign on top. She is 'Love'. But, I am

so transient. And quick. Majestic.

 

Very wise and wonderful way

 

I loved .

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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This one's different from your usual, Joel. It leans heavily toward the meditative and seems to point at recklessness and its consequences.

Anyway, the rubble keeps things away from a blue sky ....

 

In the end, shadows covered the details of the fall.

I would love some background on this poem, not because it doesn't stand on its own, rather only because I'm lucky enough to know the poet. What inspired you?

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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I actually challenged myself if I can apply my new writing style to a love poem. I just started writing and I ended up with this, tonyv.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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