badger11 Posted April 21, 2013 Share Posted April 21, 2013 successiva si prega di We shuffle forward, two paces, puddles pooling regret on the bleached floor; in front my son, with fiery hair, skull and flame dotted on his milky skin. os gwelwch yn dda nesaf Outside the incontinence of angels, inside such heat! Doors open with credit card fate, my mum with umbrella scurries in. næst skaltu Two priests queue close-by, and I clasp my ex's hand and almost breathe in cider trees brimming with scent and summer sin. pwochen tanpri Pimply kids scoop sweets from 'pick n' mix': blue uppers for her, green dragons for him. Dad grabs a bottle of scotch: he's wearing Doc Martens and looks bone thin. next please I shed my clothes and look back, through the tunnel, to the garden, where all endings begin. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted April 21, 2013 Share Posted April 21, 2013 Interesting queue, with those on it, profiled. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted April 22, 2013 Share Posted April 22, 2013 cider trees brimming with scent and summer sin. Mmmm, nice alliteration AND image. In fact, all the characters are visible. But now, Mr. Badge, I can never post my poem called "Q". It is a tritina with the end words Kew, cue, and queue. Maybe after the furor from yours. :) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted April 22, 2013 Share Posted April 22, 2013 Brilliant Badge. Stark real and yet it imbues the ordinary with mythic depth. The last stanza is to my ear, perfect. J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
badger11 Posted April 22, 2013 Author Share Posted April 22, 2013 Thanks JJ, dcm, and Dr C. The Q has gone, post on marti Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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