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My disgraceful life !!!!


Bloodyday
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LIFE

2 consonants and 2 vowels

Darling, life is beautiful!

Being undress, now provide me 2 short towels icon_cool.gif

 

 

Water supply has been cut yesterday

due to unpaid bill and rude landlord.

Darling, my credit card is bouncing now

How would you marry such a lovely fraud? icon_twisted.gif

 

When I, first, got your number

Your voice was like a lollipop to me

I was eagerly waiting for the first date

Then I chewed my socks watching you an ugly Betty. affraid.gif

 

But you kept pressing on me

my desire chewing my pillows everyday icon_evil.gif

my head got busted one day

I lost my job; “Goodbye”, why don’t you say? icon_sad.gif

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goldenlangur

Hello Bloodyday,

 

Your poem is laden with the anguish of love. It flows like a song! While the heart plays havoc life around you comes tumbling down. The details here are wonderfully vivid:

 

Bloodyday wrote:

 

Water supply has been cut yesterday

due to unpaid bill and rude landlord.

Darling, my credit card is bouncing now

How would you marry such a lovely fraud?
icon_twisted.gif

 

 

One senses that she remains out of reach and therefore the poet suffers.

 

 

And while the pain of indifferent love continues, you seem to have turned to poetry - you're in good company - bards from days of yore have sung of sleepless nights and the malaise of the heart.

 

 

Take care,

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Aleksandra

Bloodyday, this is interesting way of expressing the poem. Using the numbers than the words, looks interesting.

 

The flows of the imageries and details are pretty good expressed.

 

i like it

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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GD, due to decreasing call rate in our country, it's a common phenomena ta make date with the unknown numbers. The teen aged and under 30 people like to chat over mobile phones with opposite sex. sometimes it's hard to guess how pritty is she with i am talking.

 

in most of the case things go wrong and this poem is about this situation.

 

aleksandra and pawn shop, actually i wanna make a fun with this thing because all the stories are same with some different accent but still those stories make me laugh!

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How true, the sentiments of the poem.

 

Even before mobile phones became popular, a friend put me up on a blind date as a prank. She knew I, like any other young guys, would date only pretty girls but she sold the idea that I should trust her and set me up with a young girl well below my expectation. She must have enjoyed seeing me trying to be polite before I found a reason to leave. Bad boy!

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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