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Black Sky


JoelJosol
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There is no visible city crow circling

a black sky, blackened by smog, by night.

But I am here. Are the little wings crippled

or is this the loneliness of my pillows?

 

I demand your daily tribute of smiles whether

the sun is up high in the skyscraper or that window

glass cleaner darkening my view. She does not care,

of the printer's being out of paper.

 

If the power goes out while in a lift, I will not

panic. But you will miss this little thing's drift.

Who knows? This could be my version of a black sky.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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More of the new style, Joel! icon_smile.gif This one seems to lean toward expressionism.

 

"Black sky" is a fantastic image. I get the impression that it's not just the night sky that is black.

 

I love this part:

I demand your daily tribute of smiles whether

the sun is up high in the skycraper or that window

glass cleaner darkens my view ...

Daily tribute of smiles is superb! Keep 'em coming!

 

Tony icon_smile.gif

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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goldenlangur

Hi JoelJosol,

 

I like the way you use a disclaimer to underline the N's acute feelings of loneliness. The "Black Sky" reflects this wonderfully.

 

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Thank you, Tony and GL. It is indeed more of the new style but it is not completely "inaccessible" as I still want a link to my reader to unravel what I want to say.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Aleksandra

Joel, this is wonderful poem. I agree with all what GL and Tony said here.

You are linking so good what you want to say, and I love this new style how is going.

 

I love the expression and imagery "Black sky"

 

Keep writing Joel

 

ALeksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

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Thanks too, Alek.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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