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the end?

 

 

 

Methinks we near the end

milleniums we've spent

muddying clear waters

 

Facts are not to slow down

freedoms we insist on

forgetting what we do

 

We've known the consequence

when we abandon sense

wishing change to vanish

 

Propogation assumed

people see no purpose

putting on the birth-brakes

 

Vision is limited

vectored to the short line

vending only profits

 

Pay less than the true price

pretend that it's all cheap

parlaying that gamble

 

Destined to hit the wall

doesn't seem to matter

digesting all at speed

 

Have you any concern

how we've chosen the end

handling it badly

 

Could you find another

course of life to follow

caring that we survive

 

 

 

 

'keeper

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edit 042513 / 2037

from the black desert

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Hi Keeper, The ancient Welsh poets would often repeat the first letter, syllable or word in each line of the stanza. They called it cymeriad (memory). With the archaic language beginning "methinks" and the adherance to syllable, line and stanza count the whole poem took on an ancient feel. Cool!

6 syllable lines, 3 line stanzas, 3 three stanza units (that one wasn't as obvious as the syllable and line count.)

 

And by the way the imagery ain't bad either. "putting on the birth brakes" I enjoyed this one.

 

~~Tink

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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Love the look (all tight lines), feel, and form. Oh, yeah, the message, too. Nice job.

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Not qualified to comment on poetic form or meter, but the content seems a message of "chickens coming home to roost." Still, I'm usually wrong.

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