pawn shop Posted May 16, 2009 Share Posted May 16, 2009 We were partying together Derek, 18, about to join the Navy, 6 foot 2, rugged, handsome me, 43, 3:30am, friday have to be at work at 9am music, talking, smoking, drinking when out of the blue when from out of nowhere Derek propositioned me he'd do this to me he'd let me do that to him couldn't believe it it's as if my TV started floating around the room I knew he had slight bi-sexual tendencies..... but he's really a lady-killer at his age lots of various sexual experiences I quickly and firmly said " I'm going to pretend I just didn't hear that" he shrugged his shoulders - as if he was disappointed in me as if I wasn't 'wild' anymore in his eyes I crashed at 4 am dragged myself to work as Derek slept in the living room face down, sprawled out Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 16, 2009 Share Posted May 16, 2009 it is fascintaing how different bi's and gays see the world. as always jonathan you come up with very unique interesting poems. your last few poems have been enjoyable to read. larsen aka victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 16, 2009 Share Posted May 16, 2009 Hi pawnshop, A brilliant image here: pawn shop wrote: it's as if my TV started floating around the room The closing lines are quite ambiguous. I like your understated style which has impact. goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 16, 2009 Share Posted May 16, 2009 I like how you describe him with physical details and describe yourself simply as "43." I agree with Golden: the TV spinning around the room image is fantastic. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 16, 2009 Share Posted May 16, 2009 Yes interesting poem and how nice you expressed this subject I like that line too Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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