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Posted

I drank last cup of sorrow

tasted sour in full of bowl

Some tears leaving me behind

like abandon kingdom to fall

 

Breezes vibrates my heart

like the lea bows in curve

I walk against the time

to trick the end for love

 

If I could control my feelings

spending time to snooze

for your dreams how they look

to shine your sky with blues

 

My missing sunshine bestowed the

oath to my crooked life is dimmed.

Perhaps living in normal sense

is erased by the fate screamed

 

What should i say: still alive or not,

I don't know about my life

Living like a corpse is the only meaning

or mocking the death with a knife!

goldenlangur
Posted

Hello Bloodyday,

 

To be driven to this brink as you show in your poem is the other face of love.

 

These lines are truly poignant:

 

Bloodyday wrote:

...

I walk against the time

to trick the end for love

....

Perhaps living in normal sense

is erased by the fate ...

 

 

 

Reminds me of the songs of love penned by the Indian poet and film director Gulzhar - always a sense of loss and longing he evokes in his lyrics.

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

Aleksandra
Posted

Some tears leaving me behind

like abandon kingdom to fall

what a wonderful expression Bloodyday. Very hurtful poem. The sadness is expressed on wonderful way, and very poetical. Poem full with good expressions and imageries.

 

I love how sounds the ending part. It hits:

 

 

What should i say: still alive or not,

I don't know about my life

Living like a corpse is the only meaning

or mocking the death with a knife!

 

Thanks for sharing

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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