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And now into May

how quickly you slipped away.

April's poetry.

from the black desert

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This is a keeper! I love the twist at the end. Is there a period at the end of line two and three or is my screen smeared that I could not tell. But I prefer no dots at the end that would enable the reader to have a double reading.

 

Very much enjoyed.

 

Lake

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Lake,

Thanks for you comment.

I hadn't intended the double reading, though I employ that trickery often. And, in this case, it does work better than I knew. The periods are not, to my knowledge, traditional in haiku or senryu, though the crisp break between the parallels is. I have been "experimenting" with them. I like them one day and another day I don't. ???

 

Juris & Moonqueen,

Glad you enjoyed this bit.

from the black desert

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