douglas Posted June 11, 2013 Share Posted June 11, 2013 Brave Loverscouples meeting in the street embracing in the darkness in the rain and between the slanting light from neon signs watch them talking sexily to each other about their attractions and their distractions and i am attracted to them and to their sensuous interactions and yet it falls - quiet nature - in glimmering waterfalls moisturising lips and eyelids and washing everything clean today was a sexy day i must confess and so my sensibilities are no longer sensible but i can still recognise lust in an eye or the subtle smile hiding within lips i remember talking in the rain like them i remember cutting a finer silhouette. we've all been the paramours and the paramounted don't you ever forget it! passion is as much a gift as creativity or intuition it is the thing that makes people look and think and remember it really takes courage to stand there - committing to something but i'm sure you both know how lonely it can be with too much time to yourself... Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted June 11, 2013 Share Posted June 11, 2013 A great reflection on the nature of passion (and being alone). Ahh yes the spring, when despite my best intentions the night air breathes a hint of lust;-) Con/Jur/D Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted June 12, 2013 Share Posted June 12, 2013 "i remember talking in the rain like them i remember cutting a finer silhouette." There is a nicely spun thread of empathy which runs through the piece... perhaps taking pleasure in the happiness of others (as opposed to “Schadenfreude” ... pleasure derived from the misfortune of others) . Though your "lonely" last stanza brings to mind a half forgotten quote from the acerbic John Lennon, "Happiness is just how you feel when you don't feel miserable." B. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted June 13, 2013 Share Posted June 13, 2013 I see-revealed-the masks of jealousy, a time lost, but a realization of the beauty of stolen moments, if only in memory. It's not nice to make an old brain think. Beautifully constructed and fluid throughout. My reward for another daybreak. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted June 13, 2013 Share Posted June 13, 2013 i remember cutting a finer silhouette. Oh, heavens, yes. And a beautiful line that was, too. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted June 16, 2013 Share Posted June 16, 2013 Nice work, Douglas. I echo the sentiments of the other commentators. - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dansalinger Posted June 18, 2013 Share Posted June 18, 2013 wow...very nice...I love the imagery at the beginning (first made me think of that famous wwII picture of the soldier and woman embracing) only to be delivered into sadness of being lonely...thanks for posting dan Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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