jainrohit Posted June 20, 2013 Share Posted June 20, 2013 Life is nothing but a suspended state ;We all are suspended by strings of fate.Someone else will take away your reaping ;Your eyes will dry ; waiting for rebate.What's now- won't be then ; what was-won't be now ;Life's uncertainty - we cannot negate.Life is nothing but a suspended state.....Ephemeral - vulnerable we all are ;Is intelligent design worth a debate.He left us in hunger - on creation ;How can our creator be called so great.Someone likes my wealth; my possessions ;When all is gone - with whom should i relate.Life is nothing but a suspended state.....Stop repenting ! O besotted lover ;That girl ain't a claim that you can probate.'' Rohit '' sees life's truth in those porous eyes ;Whose state - life did not reciprocate ...Life is nothing but a suspended state ;We all are suspended by strings of fate..... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted June 21, 2013 Share Posted June 21, 2013 I love form. This ghazal is probably the most UNIQUE in topic and its "tweaks". I liked it, mucho. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted June 28, 2013 Share Posted June 28, 2013 What a fascinating form. Orally it must be amazing, read out loud with proper pacing. Thanks for this. Enjoyed. DC&J Quote thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted June 28, 2013 Share Posted June 28, 2013 Agree with the above. Such an interesting form.. especially how each couplet stands on its own. Well worth exploring. Much appreciated. B. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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