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April 4


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The mountain came very near

and filled the windscreen

before it fell away of a sudden just like

that and all I coud see

was the pallid blue sky

hosting wispy clouds.

 

It was a close -run thing,

a re-entry into the permanent world

I had just come back from

where all was dark and silent

and there can be no time

unless one awakes.

 

And if one does not awake

I suppose this must be death:

no trumpets virgins or angels.

 

 

 

 

Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim

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Hi Brendan, This piece is so clear and simple and honest. It just feels real, as if I am there experiencing what you experienced. I am probably not making much sense but that was my reaction to your poem.

 

~~Tink

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

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This spoke to me, in my own twisted way. I feel empathy. Welcome home.

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Good to see you again. This coincides interestingly with a book I'm reading at the moment.. Terry Pratchett and Stephen Baxter's, “The Long Earth”..and “stepping” back and forth from a "Datum Earth" through different parallels of reality. B.

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I am finding this not so clear - perhaps it is a bit too spare or the gap between the experiences a bit too wide.

 

 

And soon Death will become the New Black of fashion, what with all the baby-boomers "coming of a certain age".

from the black desert

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no trumpets virgins or angels.

 

Comforting somehow.

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  • 2 weeks later...
Frank E Gibbard

As said above by fd welcome back Bren, a slice of death ooh-er. Frank

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Coming back to this and bearing in mind the cryptic date: 74 people were killed then, after an illegally constructed building collapsed in Thane, India. B.

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David W. Parsley

Hi Bren,

 

There is something fresh and immediate about this piece, with its brevity and sense of awareness. I don't know everything about the circumstances and perhaps don't need to.

 

- Dave

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