dedalus Posted June 27, 2013 Share Posted June 27, 2013 In a mist-filled snow cast in grey shadows sat an old green bench with flaking paint; it had a beady-eyed crow at its end who crossly flew away when we approached. I don’t really know, you said, what I’ll do; and I said, I know, darling, but I’m sure it will be all right. And then I brushed the snowflakes away from your eyes and kissed you. That was in Istanbul where old green steamers went lurching across the Horn softly, silently puffing …. I have grown old and resent each bedridden day spent thinking; I particularly despise the night, each sleepless night and deep where ancient memories softly creep. Quote Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted June 27, 2013 Share Posted June 27, 2013 Gamut of emotions in this short piece! Did not see THAT ending! Pretty darn powerful. Clear images. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted June 27, 2013 Share Posted June 27, 2013 Third effort response: I get the same types of emotions from your words a I do reading a well-written history. I can understand why you are a successful teacher. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
moonqueen Posted June 27, 2013 Share Posted June 27, 2013 Brendan, this is really written so beautifully, I found the flow lead me from beginnning to end with a constant 'reel' playing in my head, unavoidably. These words, much more than simply words. mq Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted June 28, 2013 Share Posted June 28, 2013 Another brilliant demonstration of your exquisite talent. Well, well done! Con/Jur/D Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted July 7, 2013 Share Posted July 7, 2013 Something for all in wonderful journey which allows the reader to make his/her diversions before the destination. Much enjoyed. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gatekeeper Posted July 8, 2013 Share Posted July 8, 2013 I was liking this right up to the end, and then it crashed, with a cringe. I think you could finish this with less conventional or predictable language. Quote from the black desert Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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