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Hibiscus Sunset


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Hibiscus Sunset

 

The veins within the petals
Of the pink hibiscus

Make them look like floral ears

And they are listening to the sound of the sea
Indigo waves kissing the hidden shoreline

They are listening to the smooth and salty
Song of the early evening winds
Laced with the scent of seaweed
And the strong smell of the sun
Escaping from rocks in the twilight

In the distance
Beyond the dancing hibiscus
The ancient mountains transform
And shape shift within mist
As the sunset
Drags her purple and ochre robes
Across misty outlines and silhouettes

Waiting...

 

 

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Beautiful and strong images. As Clear as a bell on a cool winter eve. Beautiful!

 

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"And the strong smell of the sun

Escaping from rocks in the twilight"

 

Over all a colourful feast to stir the senses. Enjoyed. B.

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"As the sunset
Drags her purple and ochre robes"

 

I love descriptions of sunrises and sets, this is excellent!

 

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Gatekeeper

Mountains usually are ancient.

Maybe another modifier would have more impact.

from the black desert

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  • 2 weeks later...

Color/ colour - evocative indeed (close your eyes and you can see it) but a little bit too much laid down in a very short space.

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