douglas Posted July 6, 2013 Share Posted July 6, 2013 Hibiscus Sunset The veins within the petalsOf the pink hibiscus Make them look like floral earsAnd they are listening to the sound of the seaIndigo waves kissing the hidden shorelineThey are listening to the smooth and saltySong of the early evening windsLaced with the scent of seaweedAnd the strong smell of the sunEscaping from rocks in the twilightIn the distanceBeyond the dancing hibiscusThe ancient mountains transformAnd shape shift within mistAs the sunsetDrags her purple and ochre robesAcross misty outlines and silhouettesWaiting... Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted July 6, 2013 Share Posted July 6, 2013 Beautiful and strong images. As Clear as a bell on a cool winter eve. Beautiful! Con/Jur/D Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted July 7, 2013 Share Posted July 7, 2013 "And the strong smell of the sun Escaping from rocks in the twilight" Over all a colourful feast to stir the senses. Enjoyed. B. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
moonqueen Posted July 8, 2013 Share Posted July 8, 2013 "As the sunsetDrags her purple and ochre robes" I love descriptions of sunrises and sets, this is excellent! mq Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gatekeeper Posted July 8, 2013 Share Posted July 8, 2013 Mountains usually are ancient. Maybe another modifier would have more impact. Quote from the black desert Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted July 18, 2013 Share Posted July 18, 2013 Douglas this piece is simply beautiful. Hooked by the title and reeled in by the imagery. Loved it.~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dedalus Posted July 19, 2013 Share Posted July 19, 2013 Color/ colour - evocative indeed (close your eyes and you can see it) but a little bit too much laid down in a very short space. Quote Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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