David W. Parsley Posted July 15, 2013 Share Posted July 15, 2013 PHOTOGRAPH OF THE NSF TEAM Even as she places it the mind struggles to recall which illustrious group is pictured here set to begin the ubiquitous piquant fade demanded each piece in a coming retrospective. Spiked heels punctuate the rustle of her passing down echoed marble where honors pose for discovered genomes, dark matter, eruptions on astral shores. Never is it said she wonders while checking door bar and latch if memory poises to label this long and latest of waves cresting its trophies of human flower going out with the restive suicides or haunting her steps in what wing flickers anew the caustic Alexandrian flame. Note: NSF stands for National Science Foundation previously unpublished© 2013 David W. ParsleyParsley Poetry Collection Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted July 15, 2013 Share Posted July 15, 2013 Beautifully crafted, particularly like the 'Caustic Alexandrian Flame.' I can smell the dust and chemicals in the halls. That immediate. Fascinating perspective. Another brilliant work! Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted July 21, 2013 Author Share Posted July 21, 2013 I wrote this piece a few years back (around 2004), made a few revisions. With the defacing of gigantic figures of Buddha, the recent vandalism of the International Museum of Islamic Cultures in Timbuktu (including the burning of irreplaceable scrolls), etc., I am concerned that a new wave of anarchy could be rising to threaten the preservation of heroic labors in the humanities and sciences, repeating crimes of the past, like the burning of the great library of Alexandria in the 9th century CE. Thank you, Juris, for your resonance with this insight and with the poem's experience. - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted July 21, 2013 Share Posted July 21, 2013 An excellent, well presented and thought inspiring piece. Leaves me in mind of the way progress is layered; and that each generation is faced with the formidable task of assimilating the total sum of past human knowledge, before making its own contribution. At the risk of digression: Your comments lead me to the ancient (censor) practise of removing statues and all traces of the disfavoured. For technology is moving forward so rapidly that many established fields of thought may become outmoded in the space of one brief lifetime. Whew! B. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted July 27, 2013 Author Share Posted July 27, 2013 As usual, Geoff, your insights and extensions therefrom are well considered, providing worthwhile discursion. The practice of cultural erasure is a kind of genocide in its way, participating in the poem's symbolic 'dark matter' invisibly exerting its elusive social gravitis through the centuries, as well as the violent 'eruptions' that erased the physical remnants of the culture's legacy. Thanks, - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gatekeeper Posted July 29, 2013 Share Posted July 29, 2013 Missed it - a bit too cryptic for me,perhaps. Quote from the black desert Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
moonqueen Posted July 30, 2013 Share Posted July 30, 2013 I encounter complexities in your work that cause me to read them, many times over, but I will say you do 'paint' a picture for me. I can almost smell her perfume as she staccatos by, all business. I also worry about the treasures of our world, even those that may represent pain for many, so many already destroyed or stolen. It's one of those things I just don't comprehend. Fortunately, they have been able to put the Lincoln Memorial to rights. Why do they do it? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted August 3, 2013 Author Share Posted August 3, 2013 Missed it - a bit too cryptic for me,perhaps. GK, I much appreciate this kind of feedback. My current composition style is motivated by the twin need of intellectuals and academics for depth, complexity, and ever richer originality, vice that of the more general lover of poetry - a disappearing breed alienated by decades of experimentation leading to obfuscation, profanity, and obscenity of subject and language. I myself tend to wonder if I don't fall into both camps at the same time. It is darned inconvenient. So I write poetry that potentially appeals to multiple levels of sophistication while attempting to rescue what should be an inherent accessibility and sense of beauty in the Art I love so much. (And I do not deny that even a sophisticated reader will not necessarily be familiar with concepts or works over which I happen to be chin stroking! But it does provide an extra reward for any who are.) Your comment tells me I may have strayed too far from accessibility. But the brevity of the response leaves me wondering where the thread gets lost: the narrative level of the museum work (BTW: NSF stands for National Science Foundation - not sure I should expect folks to know or be able to easily discover that...)? Or is it the closing stanza? If the latter, the first part refers to Tennyson's "Guinevere", extending an (ending?) Arthurian celebration ...In that fair Order of my Table Round, A glorious company, the flower of men, To serve as model for the mighty world, And be the fair beginning of a time. And the second reference is to the 9th century burning of the great Library of Alexandria. But I had hoped recognition of these allusions would not be essential to an enjoyment of the poem. In any case, I appreciate the feedback: cryptic is not my aim. Please keep telling me when I have wandered there. Grateful! - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dedalus Posted August 6, 2013 Share Posted August 6, 2013 The second stanza is really good: Spiked heels punctuate the rustle of her passing down echoed marble where honors pose for discovered genomes, dark matter, eruptions on astral shores. and the rest is Richard Wilbur-like crunching of words too quickly into images that do not coalesce. This kind of poetry is word-bound and intelligent BUT it is very difficult to read and appreciate. I don't mean to be harsh, but words and the weighing of their meaning is more the function of philosophers, not poets. But, of course, there are many, many different ways and styles of writing poetry! Quote Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted August 7, 2013 Share Posted August 7, 2013 eruptions on astral shores Very evocative piece, but cryptic for me as well. So mysterious that it IS compelling to read, but my mental images are sketchy. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted August 11, 2013 Author Share Posted August 11, 2013 I encounter complexities in your work that cause me to read them, many times over, but I will say you do 'paint' a picture for me. I can almost smell her perfume as she staccatos by, all business. I also worry about the treasures of our world, even those that may represent pain for many, so many already destroyed or stolen. It's one of those things I just don't comprehend. Fortunately, they have been able to put the Lincoln Memorial to rights. Why do they do it? MQ, like DrCon, you confirm the poem's appeal to multiple senses (I have always envied Keats in particular for his ability to accomplish such evocation). You touch on the image I wished to be most vivid: that of a professional modern woman empowered to be among the guardians of our pains-takingly, heroically constructed culture. In fact, the Liberated Woman herself is one of the most precious products of this development. If our present culture is truly cresting, truly caught in the under-tow of emerging anarchic forces of suicidally committed extremists, this very liberty is one of the flowers (not yet fully blossomed) that will surely first fall victim to it. Thanks, - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted August 11, 2013 Author Share Posted August 11, 2013 ... the rest is Richard Wilbur-like crunching of words too quickly into images that do not coalesce. This kind of poetry is word-bound and intelligent BUT it is very difficult to read and appreciate. I don't mean to be harsh, but words and the weighing of their meaning is more the function of philosophers, not poets. But, of course, there are many, many different ways and styles of writing poetry! Brendan (and others), thanks for this perspective from a respected colleague, couched with a pleasing acknowledgment of room for alternate aesthetic. I confess to a no-more-than-tepid appreciation of Richard Wilbur's work, so the arrow struck mark. Still stroking my chin over the comparison, but taken to heart. I realize that a more Kiplingesque ruminating narrative could explicate things over a doubled length of the poem, but I feared loss of the intensity and excitement that facilitate a sense of personal revelation. There is also the desire to not excessively taint or offend the reader's own judgment with too much telling (rather than showing). The risk of such concentration is losing your reader, which I apparently have managed to do. With the ever-shrinking access to this site, the members of PMO are becoming my sole audience. So your feedback is painfully important to me. Thank You, - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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