dr_con Posted July 21, 2013 Share Posted July 21, 2013 Under the Influence It’s always tomorrow the familial guards of the Beloved It’s always yesterday the jealous suitors standing in the way And yet the finches flit among the rose hips the neighbor washes the car the green blades amid summer’s yellow and brown the clink of ice in a tall glass and of course without a doubt the climate of clouds against our buttress between vacuum and this long held breath Whisper Right Here Right Now The Beloved awaits the last place you thought to look All around absolute ecstasy Exhale this long moment of eternal embrace. Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted July 21, 2013 Share Posted July 21, 2013 Timeless, yet contemporary. A familiar separation of generations and a coming together of cultures. Enjoyed, like running through a sprinkler--through the ages. I fear for my granddaughter in college and have to remind myself that she has her own life. Thank you, Doctor Juris prudence. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
moonqueen Posted July 21, 2013 Share Posted July 21, 2013 Juris, I so enjoyed this! S3 is as surely a photograph, as crisp and clear as those printed on Kodak paper, for the enjoyment of the reader. Thanks for sharing this one. t Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted July 22, 2013 Author Share Posted July 22, 2013 Thanks MQ, Franklin! Franklin, I enjoyed your humanized take;-) And BTW the name is Latvian not Latin so the J is silent;-) My mnemonic for people who are trying to remember my name.. Tim Leary, pointed out to y Ex (Justine) when she was buying me one of his books:That our names meant Justice from 2 different perspectives - French & Latin. No wonder we fought like possessed Kittens & puppies.... ;-) Con/Jur/D Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted July 22, 2013 Share Posted July 22, 2013 All around absolute ecstasy If we just took the time.....And I like the line "And yet the finches flit". Yes, for the alliteration, BUT also because it is so open: are they flitting oblivious to, in spite of, or in conjunction with all these? Nice piece. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted July 23, 2013 Author Share Posted July 23, 2013 Thanks DC! yes indeed why do they flit? ;-) Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted July 23, 2013 Share Posted July 23, 2013 Juris, no doubt you have read Jaroslav Hasek's "The Good Soldier Svejk." A true classic of WWI that is fitting for all ages. Should be required reading for anyone considering a military career. Sorry, I was trying a pun with your name; puns are never a good idea. Was that Timothy Leary of LSD fame? Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted July 24, 2013 Author Share Posted July 24, 2013 Puns are always a good idea! ;-) Yes the infamous Timothy Leary or Saint Tim... And I haven't read "The Good Soldier Svejk." but I'm going to- Thanks for the lead.... Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted July 25, 2013 Share Posted July 25, 2013 A pleasure to read. It left me with a spiritual sense.. a celebration of life perhaps .. appreciation.. of those simple things that we take for granted (even the not so nice ones). And all too often we don't see the wood for the trees. G. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gatekeeper Posted July 29, 2013 Share Posted July 29, 2013 Haven't quite decided what to make of this, on the whole, but that's okay. I like it a bunch. I wrote a poem about "the flit" once upon a time, though it was sunflowers, as I recall. I wonder if I could find it - I am so totally disorganized . . . Quote from the black desert Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted August 2, 2013 Author Share Posted August 2, 2013 Thanks Ben & Gate! Much gratified about your comments and Gate see if ou can find it, Flit sounds marvelous! ;-) Con/Jur/D Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted August 3, 2013 Share Posted August 3, 2013 Haven't quite decided what to make of this, on the whole, but that's okay. I like it a bunch. I wrote a poem about "the flit" once upon a time, though it was sunflowers, as I recall. I wonder if I could find it - I am so totally disorganized . . . I, too, am left with a sense of concrete meaning lying beneath the rills and cascades of language and image in this poem. But that is typical of your work, Doc, and I gladly pay the perplexed price of admission to ride the falls! I find particular interest in pondering that climate of clouds against our buttress between vacuum and this long held breath It plays the personal against the cosmic, acknowledging accident of our life-sustaining and culture-continuing atmosphere here on our modest rocky planet. Why here, when Mars and others were not able to hold such breath for so long? The scientist in me is thrilled! SIDE NOTE: Empathy on that 'disorganized' thing, GK. Toward the end of my first poetry phase, I wrote an extremely ambitious pastoral elegy for the child peace activist, Samantha Smith. Over the years, only a couple fragments of this monumental effort have been preserved. Sigh. Thanks Once Again, Doc! - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted August 4, 2013 Author Share Posted August 4, 2013 No thank you Dave! I'm very gratified to have your reactions and engagement with my work- and yes the scientist in me is flattered by recognition! Many Thanks, Con/Jur/D Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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