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As I enter this new-found

depth, I do so warily at first,

but the warmth and need

to go deeper are overwhelming.

 

My body and mind glow,

but I move cautiously,

savoring sensations

that abound in waves.

 

At the limits of my ability,

my quest rewards me with

that rarest find of all:

a reef-protected live shell.

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Beautiful experience, elegantly recounted.

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Franklin, I smell metaphor of a 'deeper' ilk than you generally use. Much, much enjoyed.

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Aha! Open to speculation ...

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You have the reader wandering right up to the end - good that it is a short poem or one might have wandered off.

from the black desert

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Or dozed off.

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Fun 'dive' into a fully fleshed experience. Much enjoyed!

 

Juris

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David W. Parsley

Fun 'dive' into a fully fleshed experience. Much enjoyed!

 

Juris

Agreed. And also agree that there are other tantalizing "live shells" probably lying nearby, but the reader is not given quite enough light to uncover them at this depth. I like the tightened sense of form in this poem and therefore will take the liberty of recommending a honing pass through the second stanza. As for the elusive okay-so-what's-this-really-about stuff, I am not going to speculate in this lighting.

 

Thanks Paco,

- Dave

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Thanks to all who "found" something here. Have tightened to my limits, hopefully. Perhaps a metaphor will emerge from the depths.

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David W. Parsley

Nice!!

 

- Dave

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