Bloodyday Posted May 17, 2009 Share Posted May 17, 2009 life won't return for second time keep rocking! this is the gesture we won't spend sing our song like cheerful band. last night an angel came in my dream took all the tears and gave a kiss this morning i've got a mail some words drive me away to sail. screaming the world with the wildest melody this is the time i cherish for to enjoy my every moment to rule the world erasing my every lament! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
pawn shop Posted May 17, 2009 Share Posted May 17, 2009 I'm glad, at your young age, that you recognize your possibilities with each day that arrives. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 17, 2009 Share Posted May 17, 2009 poetry in motion. i love the aliteration you used in your poem. it made this an excelent read. victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 17, 2009 Share Posted May 17, 2009 Yes, Bloodyday, life is short, and it won't return for second time. But the light has returned for you, and "this morning" you've "got a mail." The end is triumphant: screaming the world with the wildest melody this is the time i cherish for to enjoy my every moment to rule the world erasing my every lament! This reads like a tribute to perseverance. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 17, 2009 Share Posted May 17, 2009 Bloodyday hi and nice to see you around. You shared very beautiful poem. You made a good write in this poem bc you are starting this one with a voice of wiser, then you are going detailed with speaking about a dream, with a personal view of the life, so on the end to finish with very powerful poetical expressions, strong and so positive. Much enjoyed Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 17, 2009 Share Posted May 17, 2009 (edited) Hi Bloodyday, Such passion and anguish in your poem! This stanza encapsulates this movingly: screaming the world with the wildest melodythis is the time i cherish for to enjoy my every moment to rule the world erasing my every lament! Particularly love screaming the world with the wildest melody and also, erasing my every lament goldenlangur Edited May 17, 2009 by goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodyday Posted May 17, 2009 Author Share Posted May 17, 2009 What should i say, life has possibilities in manifold vibration. That's why some relations present a flow of sinusoidal wave like the upper stream shows happiness and the lower shows the melancholy! Even if i want to see in different perspective, i lost myself all on a sudden realizing what i've lost. life is no longer simple or what so ever for me, but i know i need to go on like others did! Is this the time to live on with smile or scream in silence? an ocean of sorrow is groaning everytime when i try to smile! Forget it! let's live our life! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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