Bloodyday Posted May 17, 2009 Share Posted May 17, 2009 An ocean flows so versatile with a breeze to embrace keeping all the tears, sorrows my heart becomes so dense. while try to smile loud old memories pull my notions reminds me what I’ve lost feeling the force of vibrations. but I need to go on what others did in past new world to embrace everywhere a new role to cast! till then I’ll live alone craving my scream in silence letting my happiness theft away Like the kingdom without fence! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 17, 2009 Share Posted May 17, 2009 hi bloodyday, excellent poem my friend. the metphors work well. the poem flows with some very original imagery. larsen aka victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodyday Posted May 17, 2009 Author Share Posted May 17, 2009 Dear Aka yesterday was not a day to enjoy my happiness blooms with another decoy Thanks! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 17, 2009 Share Posted May 17, 2009 A curious blend of hopefulness and despair -- the poem comes equipped with fresh expressions throughout. I especially like my heart becomes so dense, feeling the force of vibrations, and the kingdom without fence. These lines take me to another dimension, somewhere between the beach and the stars. I like this sequel. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Bloodyday Posted May 17, 2009 Author Share Posted May 17, 2009 hi Tony some fallen hearts may realize the pains how it become the source of their poems. tears may cover the eyesight but can't drown old memories. sometimes tears get dry. then you look at the sky with zero emotion just living like a dead! thanks for your comment! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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