Benjamin Posted October 3, 2013 Share Posted October 3, 2013 I thought of countless meteors like sperm rebuffed by an egg till one is a meteorite Of The Great Barrier Reef visible from space (it's said) and teeming with marine life Of APCs and shot knees Insults stones and IEDs Blasts-- of living gale that rage over land like possessed souls Of his new van with logos and chemicals-- for cleaning ovens hobs and stoves. A ginger smile in civvies-- I shook hands and wished him well Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted October 6, 2013 Author Share Posted October 6, 2013 I'd been listening to “The Eve Of The War” from Jeff Wayne's 1978 musical album “The War of The Worlds”. The television was tuned to a wild life show.. sound off ; when a much younger friend (ex-forces) visited me. After fifteen turbulent years in the “paras” he'd found it difficult to adjust to civilian life. Eventually, following a bequest, he'd bought a franchise... And... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gatekeeper Posted October 7, 2013 Share Posted October 7, 2013 " with logos and chemicals-" Reminds of VX, BZ, CS and all the rest of the agents we referred to only in code. And we were the ones with the responsibility. Fortunately Pres. Carter ended it all and disbanded the whole bunch, and none too soon. Or at least I hope so . . . Quote from the black desert Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted October 8, 2013 Author Share Posted October 8, 2013 Perhaps with the death of Tom Clancy a few such military "codes" and acronyms will recede from the public psyche but I won't hold my breath :-) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted October 10, 2013 Share Posted October 10, 2013 A fascinating piece. Vivid images, raw and simple- yet beautifully poignant. I really adore this. Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted October 17, 2013 Share Posted October 17, 2013 Very interesting title for this metaphor goes splendid with the imagery you paint us the reader with in your verse. You give me much food for thought to contemplate over. The imagery is rich and tells a story that can have a few particular meanings depending on what you are looking for or the direction you choose to think about in regards to each stanza in your piece. Well written!!! enjoyed... victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted October 17, 2013 Author Share Posted October 17, 2013 Thanks Juris and Victor your positive comments are much appreciated. G. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Recommended Posts
Join the conversation
You can post now and register later. If you have an account, sign in now to post with your account.
Note: Your post will require moderator approval before it will be visible.