Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted October 8, 2013 Share Posted October 8, 2013 A Flower FadesSomewhere in time i will find my dreamsall i have to do is look in the mirrori see the reflection cast by the sunlightso many of my dreams go unansweredmy hope is to hold you in my armsi give you a flower in the vaseyou set it in water by the windowi have a picture of youyou are so beautifulthe day the flower faded from viewis the day you left my worldwas the day i fell in love with you Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted October 9, 2013 Share Posted October 9, 2013 the day you left my worldwas the day i fell in love with you Sad to hear, but tragedy makes good poetry. Bravery in opening up like this.... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted October 11, 2013 Share Posted October 11, 2013 Short, simple and one of your recent best. Good Work Victor! Quote thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gatekeeper Posted October 12, 2013 Share Posted October 12, 2013 Lots of interesting puzzles and contradictions for a short poem. Quote from the black desert Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
moonqueen Posted October 12, 2013 Share Posted October 12, 2013 Nice imagery and enjoyed the brevity. Many things about which one might suppose many different meanings, but to me, it's like 'after the fact' and that kind of pain is hard to divorce. mq Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted October 15, 2013 Share Posted October 15, 2013 Memories, hopes and reality are a potent human mix and you did well to tie them in with the brevity of the poem. B. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dansalinger Posted October 22, 2013 Share Posted October 22, 2013 very nice somber piece...kind of stole my joyful mood for a second...smooth comfortable read...great images....dan Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abstrect-christ Posted November 11, 2013 Share Posted November 11, 2013 I like the love lost, yet yurned, aspect of the ending. nice work Larsen Quote Pinhead "Unbearable, isn't it? The suffering of strangers, the agony of friends. There is a secret song at the center of the world, Joey, and its sound is like razors through flesh." Joey "I don't believe you." Pinhead "Oh come, you can hear its faint echo right now. I'm here to turn up the volume. To press the stinking face of humanity into the dark blood of its own secret heart." "There's a starving beast inside my chestplaying with me until he's boredThen, slowly burying his tusks in my fleshcrawling his way out he rips open old woundsWhen I reach for the knife placed on the bedside tableits blade reflects my determined faceto plant it in my chestand carve a hole so deep it snaps my veinsHollow me out, I want to feel empty"-- "Being Able To Feel Nothing" by Oathbreakerhttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aBPy3xNwwL8 "Sky turns to a deeper grey the sun fades by the moon hell's come from the distant hills tortures dreams of the doomed and they pray, yet they prey and they pray, still they prey"-- "Still They Prey" by Coughhttps://soundcloud.com/relapserecords/sets/cough-still-they-pray Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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