dr_con Posted October 31, 2013 Share Posted October 31, 2013 The Conversation It doesn’t matter if you are here we talk anyway and sometimes just sometimes I hear you wrong No different than if you were right in front of me or if you live or went beyond beyond it just becomes even more personal and intimate The long one goes on for years it comes out of different mouths strangers lovers and madmen struggling to make sense of something without I can hear those guttural low notes as if they were yesterday the fights the flailing people forgetting their humanity or I add emotion to the silliest things A respirator A IV drip A casual comment And it doesn't matter in the longest the fear is gone gone We said hello on a Fall night when on the edge of the porch light I heard footsteps and stepped deeper into the conversation seeing leaves plummeting from the big tree saying this and your memories of green everything that flashes red and yellow syntax for your words and we get it right most of the time. Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted November 1, 2013 Share Posted November 1, 2013 I love the repitition ("gone gone") and the enjambment in the last verse (porch/light). ... and we get/it right most of the times. Not a bad place to be, Juris. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted November 1, 2013 Author Share Posted November 1, 2013 Thanks Tony! Seasonal reflections;-) Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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Benjamin Posted November 2, 2013 Share Posted November 2, 2013 A most human piece: a conversation of personal thoughts. The mind never ceases ticking over as it commingles information,routine tasks and adds meaning to emotional thought processes dominant at the same time. Enjoyed. G. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted November 7, 2013 Author Share Posted November 7, 2013 Thanks G! Indeed, yes. Appreciate the feedback. Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abstrect-christ Posted November 11, 2013 Share Posted November 11, 2013 agreed with benjamin. shouldn't it be "An IV drop."? Quote Pinhead "Unbearable, isn't it? The suffering of strangers, the agony of friends. There is a secret song at the center of the world, Joey, and its sound is like razors through flesh." Joey "I don't believe you." Pinhead "Oh come, you can hear its faint echo right now. I'm here to turn up the volume. To press the stinking face of humanity into the dark blood of its own secret heart." "There's a starving beast inside my chestplaying with me until he's boredThen, slowly burying his tusks in my fleshcrawling his way out he rips open old woundsWhen I reach for the knife placed on the bedside tableits blade reflects my determined faceto plant it in my chestand carve a hole so deep it snaps my veinsHollow me out, I want to feel empty"-- "Being Able To Feel Nothing" by Oathbreakerhttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aBPy3xNwwL8 "Sky turns to a deeper grey the sun fades by the moon hell's come from the distant hills tortures dreams of the doomed and they pray, yet they prey and they pray, still they prey"-- "Still They Prey" by Coughhttps://soundcloud.com/relapserecords/sets/cough-still-they-pray Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted November 11, 2013 Author Share Posted November 11, 2013 Thanks AC... I went back and forth on that Intravenous in this case is the modifier, so I stuck with A... And I haven't heard of an IV drop rather Drip is the continuous flow of drops, so I suppose it would work... ;-) Many Thanks! Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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