Gatekeeper Posted November 22, 2013 Share Posted November 22, 2013 November 22, 1963 I was in uniform on the drill floor It was competition day one squad at a time My fellow students were doing well we were headed for a win all the moves were correct all the uniforms neatly aligned But I remember nothing of the winners or the losers I honestly don't know how the squad I led finished No one cared how it turned out even as we finished the drill our actions were on auto-pilot our heads swimming in fear The President was dead the Colonel had said! Were we suddenly at war? Who could do such a thing? We were nearly paralyzed! But there was duty to be served leading a daily honor guard to lower the half-staff flag until the acute fear subsided The chemistry of the brain fixes such an unexpected event much like a sculptor would reveal the form as if done in an instant 112113 / 2222 Quote from the black desert Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted November 22, 2013 Share Posted November 22, 2013 much like a sculptor would reveal the form as if done in an instant Well written piece & conclusion. I am 49, but I remember where I was when Reagan was shot, when the Challenger exploded, and I was in viewing distance of the Pentagon on 9/11. "In an instant".....very correct. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted November 27, 2013 Share Posted November 27, 2013 I can relate to what the conflict in the piece wanted to project. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
abstrect-christ Posted November 28, 2013 Share Posted November 28, 2013 nice capturing of a moment. I may not have been born then, but the affects are felt long after Kennedy. Quote Pinhead "Unbearable, isn't it? The suffering of strangers, the agony of friends. There is a secret song at the center of the world, Joey, and its sound is like razors through flesh." Joey "I don't believe you." Pinhead "Oh come, you can hear its faint echo right now. I'm here to turn up the volume. To press the stinking face of humanity into the dark blood of its own secret heart." "There's a starving beast inside my chestplaying with me until he's boredThen, slowly burying his tusks in my fleshcrawling his way out he rips open old woundsWhen I reach for the knife placed on the bedside tableits blade reflects my determined faceto plant it in my chestand carve a hole so deep it snaps my veinsHollow me out, I want to feel empty"-- "Being Able To Feel Nothing" by Oathbreakerhttps://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aBPy3xNwwL8 "Sky turns to a deeper grey the sun fades by the moon hell's come from the distant hills tortures dreams of the doomed and they pray, yet they prey and they pray, still they prey"-- "Still They Prey" by Coughhttps://soundcloud.com/relapserecords/sets/cough-still-they-pray Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted December 2, 2013 Share Posted December 2, 2013 I was young but remember. This poem evokes such a time. Brilliant finish, GK. - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted December 8, 2013 Share Posted December 8, 2013 Your excellent conclusion says it all.... I recall riding my bike through the small town centre where I lived with a transistor radio pressed to my ear. The world stood still . B. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Gatekeeper Posted December 9, 2013 Author Share Posted December 9, 2013 I had never written about this until now - which might seem a bit odd - 50 years and all. I was essentially captioning the image burned into my neurons and had no idea how to close it, until i got there. Curious how that works. Guess it took 50 years. Thanks all for your comments. Quote from the black desert Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted December 9, 2013 Share Posted December 9, 2013 Born the year after- But it evokes the day lennon died (for me). well rendered and worth the wait! Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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