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(PG-17) I saw you last


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At twenty-two
I beheld you naked
and everything else disappeared
in that instant, save your diaphanous
form, eternal, ever ageless;
only I saw you last
at twenty-four.

At twenty-three
I would dream of you at
fifty: matchless gray hair changed you;
nothing on your body betrayed your age;
not one wrinkle nor extra pound;
only I saw you last
at twenty-four.

At twenty-four
I had not yet slept with
another man, much less with you.
We never saw the hearth I imagined
nor the blizzard I petitioned;
only I saw you last
at twenty-four.

At twenty-five
I did finally sleep
with another man: there was no
hearth nor blizzard, just your face in my mind
and your name upon my lips when
I came; then I saw you
as twenty-four.

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Heartwarmingly melancholy. A very vivid, very human emotion brilliant capyured. There is something Ginsbergian about this- Maybe its the want and vivid remembrance.

 

Loved it.

 

Juris

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Something makes me wonder if this love has in fact been realized. There's something incredibly sad about this:

 

... We never saw the hearth I imagined
nor the blizzard I petitioned ...

 

... there was no
hearth nor blizzard, just your face in my mind ...

 

I hope it all worked out. I'm a sucker for happy endings!

 

Tony :tongue:

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Something makes me wonder if this love has in fact been realized. There's something incredibly sad about this:

 

... We never saw the hearth I imagined

nor the blizzard I petitioned ...

 

... there was no

hearth nor blizzard, just your face in my mind ...

 

I hope it all worked out. I'm a sucker for happy endings!

 

Tony :tongue:

 

It was in the Navy. First guy I had a crush on. We were friends, and even worked on the Casualty Control Training Team near the end of our enlistments. Get this, we got out of the Navy at the same time, got jobs at GE, both in Reston, Virginia. His wife, 2 kids, he, & I rented a townhouse for the first 6 months.

 

Irony.

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Well, it probably wasn't me, I've never been in the Navy. But I did stay in a townhouse in Reston, VA for a week once! (Oh, and I stayed at a Holiday Inn Express once, too, lol.)

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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