dcmarti1 Posted November 30, 2013 Share Posted November 30, 2013 At twenty-twoI beheld you nakedand everything else disappearedin that instant, save your diaphanousform, eternal, ever ageless;only I saw you lastat twenty-four.At twenty-threeI would dream of you atfifty: matchless gray hair changed you;nothing on your body betrayed your age;not one wrinkle nor extra pound;only I saw you lastat twenty-four.At twenty-fourI had not yet slept withanother man, much less with you.We never saw the hearth I imaginednor the blizzard I petitioned;only I saw you lastat twenty-four.At twenty-fiveI did finally sleepwith another man: there was nohearth nor blizzard, just your face in my mindand your name upon my lips whenI came; then I saw youas twenty-four. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted December 9, 2013 Share Posted December 9, 2013 Heartwarmingly melancholy. A very vivid, very human emotion brilliant capyured. There is something Ginsbergian about this- Maybe its the want and vivid remembrance. Loved it. Juris Quote thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted December 10, 2013 Share Posted December 10, 2013 Something makes me wonder if this love has in fact been realized. There's something incredibly sad about this: ... We never saw the hearth I imaginednor the blizzard I petitioned ... ... there was nohearth nor blizzard, just your face in my mind ... I hope it all worked out. I'm a sucker for happy endings! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted December 11, 2013 Author Share Posted December 11, 2013 Something makes me wonder if this love has in fact been realized. There's something incredibly sad about this: ... We never saw the hearth I imagined nor the blizzard I petitioned ... ... there was no hearth nor blizzard, just your face in my mind ... I hope it all worked out. I'm a sucker for happy endings! Tony It was in the Navy. First guy I had a crush on. We were friends, and even worked on the Casualty Control Training Team near the end of our enlistments. Get this, we got out of the Navy at the same time, got jobs at GE, both in Reston, Virginia. His wife, 2 kids, he, & I rented a townhouse for the first 6 months. Irony. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted December 11, 2013 Share Posted December 11, 2013 Well, it probably wasn't me, I've never been in the Navy. But I did stay in a townhouse in Reston, VA for a week once! (Oh, and I stayed at a Holiday Inn Express once, too, lol.) Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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