pawn shop Posted May 17, 2009 Posted May 17, 2009 The rowdy mystery of personality The cute choises many voices ( This is about a party I had with music being played. I would let each person pick a song from one of the many cd's I have and then wait for their turn and then we sit there respectfully and listen to the songs while drinking and smoking) oh crap, just deleted the rest of the poem.... oh well....another one bites the dust Quote
tonyv Posted May 17, 2009 Posted May 17, 2009 Jonathan, I like all your recent poems, but this is something very different and notable from you. It's highly lyrical. The layout and musicality of it are reminiscent of ARS POETICA by Archibald MacLeish. At the end of his poem, MacLeish says, A poem should not mean But be. Your poem is in the same spirit. Wonderful work! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
pawn shop Posted May 17, 2009 Author Posted May 17, 2009 Thank you Tony..... we must get together.....come to Marlborough....my treat... stay the night ! I'm only 1 hour away..... This is about being at a party....and playing a song........for your pals.... Quote
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 17, 2009 Posted May 17, 2009 hi Jonathan, i have to admit i didn't know the direction you were heading in with this poem. i enjoyed its colorfulness of the nightlife from your perspective. the title works well with you poem here and is a good metaphor. i had to read your comments and tony's comments to better understand this write. i am becoming a big fan of your poetry. you think clearly with your poems. your poems are down to earth. larsen Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe
tonyv Posted May 17, 2009 Posted May 17, 2009 Thank you Tony.....we must get together.....come to Marlborough....my treat... stay the night ! I'm only 1 hour away..... This is about being at a party....and playing a song........for your pals.... Thank you for the open invitation, Jonathan. I'll make an effort to get up there at some point. I'm just such a turtle, and it takes me a long time to accomplish anything. But Marlboro is actually quite convenient for me. It's easy to get to, right up I495 to Rte 20 -- I know that strip right off the highway, and I have also been over to the Real Estate Marketplace (near Papa Gino's, further in the town itself). I like the area. Thank you for your generous offer. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
Aleksandra Posted May 17, 2009 Posted May 17, 2009 Jonathan. To be sincere, when I read for first time this poem - I didn't like a lot. Somehow it wasn't for my taste . Then I went back, and I got another opinion. I can express my thoughts about this poem right over your verses: always a decision ! personal opinion...... of right and of wrong I must say about the beginning of this poem. It is so powerful and so tactical. It have a power, deepness, rhyme. The rowdy mystery of personality The cute choices many voices I am glad that I read again and again this poem - that is my custom from school - " go ahead again and again - many times " Thanks for sharing Much enjoyed Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia
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