fdelano Posted January 5, 2014 Share Posted January 5, 2014 My first attempt at poetry, circa 1991: jungle boots in alien juxtaposition with riveted metal deck shrieking alert in headset matches dire radar strobes maneuvers called signals jammed to no avail shrill g-force maximum as bomber meets homing missile glare from sun and fire as fuselage splits open space dump of metal and human cargo falling screams swept away by slipstream inexorable fate draws ever near in silent welcome keening dear ones faithful to safe return Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted January 5, 2014 Author Share Posted January 5, 2014 For me, writing is wonderfully cathartic, having nothing to do with politics or personal views. My writing is in a sense history as original source, similar but world's apart from the views of St. Brendan. Writing is my way, as I am sure it is for many, of dealing with life. Understand the words or disparage them for whatever reason, they are not intended as controversy, only as a reflection of past reality. Franklin/Paco Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted January 6, 2014 Share Posted January 6, 2014 You deftly used words I have never, and could never, use in a poem. This poem is, like you said, a mirror but not a judgment. Crafted piece, this. And still evoked great sadness for me..... Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted January 6, 2014 Share Posted January 6, 2014 Well wrought! Enjoyed your first foray into the this damnable swamp! I too, see poetry as a momentary reflection of what is happening in my life- occasionally political, but I see politics as personal since no politician to my knowledge represents me;-) Nice Paco! Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted January 7, 2014 Author Share Posted January 7, 2014 Thank you Juris and Marti. This was my first attempt at poetry, edited and modified over the years. It is a mental dealing with the shoot down of BAT-21, Easter Sunday, 1972, the date of my last combat mission. Anyone interested in details can find them by searching Henry Serex, one of the many old farts called to harm's way from piloting a desk. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted January 9, 2014 Share Posted January 9, 2014 I know you said it's been revised a bit, but this is remarkably good for a first attempt. As fuselage splits -- ... open spacedump of metaland human cargofalling screamsswept awayby slipstream ...-- gave me pause. Would I pass out or have a heart attack before impact? I would hope so. I loved the first verse, too. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted January 10, 2014 Share Posted January 10, 2014 This for me is an emphatic first hand insight of how warfare in modern times has evolved to be highly efficient-- killing.. a science even. But the resultant effect in human terms never changes. Been reading recently about the "romantic" Richard The Lion-heart at the 3rd Crusade and how he had thousands of Muslim prisoners executed at Acre. Looking around the modern world, human nature never changes; perhaps technology will change the way we perceive both history and ourselves. Geoff Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted January 11, 2014 Author Share Posted January 11, 2014 Geoff, I doubt that History will ever be studied as part of any culture. We are doomed to repeat the mistakes of the past. IMO. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
moonqueen Posted January 11, 2014 Share Posted January 11, 2014 It seems to me history itself, says man never learns; perhaps if it were always the same individuals, the lessons would be learned, but as long as man dies and children are born...as each generation refuses to believe the previous, until they experience it for themselves. And through all this, we continue to kill our home (which seems now to also be fighting back). I see little hope for man, ultimately. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted January 11, 2014 Author Share Posted January 11, 2014 I also fear you are right, MQ. For more than a half century, we have been capable of ending all life on Earth. I used to fly with two hydrogen bombs; each could kill everything within a hundred miles of ground zero. The policy was MAD, good name for Mutually Assured Destruction. A military officer still follows the president around, carrying the 'football.' The briefcase contains the code to launch nuclear missiles and bombers. Dr. Strangelove was not fiction. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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