fdelano Posted February 1, 2014 Share Posted February 1, 2014 Stumbling into the blatant face of paeans and unreserved emotion, he fast turns the corner, forced to react to this new world, reasoning awry, old habits unworkable while he flails, touching down momentarily to test the icy thinness, then quick away, yawing desperately to find familiar mores and aged tactics, useless against his ignorance. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted February 1, 2014 Share Posted February 1, 2014 old habits unworkable while heflails Fascinating line. And that "touching down" opens up the reader to many possibilities.....because, to me, this is not as straightforward as it may seem. Perhaps there is some subtlety, something else going on here? ;) icy thinness Spooky, and neat piece. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted February 1, 2014 Author Share Posted February 1, 2014 Thanks, Marti. Think generation gap, especially in writing, especially in poetry. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted February 2, 2014 Share Posted February 2, 2014 Rather liked this! Very human, very truthy and profound. Thanks, Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted February 2, 2014 Author Share Posted February 2, 2014 Thanks, Doc. Sort of an old fart rant, but what else does an old fart do? ;) Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted February 4, 2014 Share Posted February 4, 2014 Liked the flight analogies. Keep ranting! Some of us listen. Sod the rest!!! Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted February 4, 2014 Author Share Posted February 4, 2014 Hi Geoff. I don't do sodding, except metaphorically, so yes, sod the rest. Reminded of old military bar song that goes "Fuck 'em all..." Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted February 17, 2014 Share Posted February 17, 2014 Yes, there's the plane metaphor, but could just as easily be a bird! ... touching down momentarily to testthe icy thinness, then quick away ... The use of paeans made me picture a gracefully aged phoenix with a bit of life still left in him. Perhaps even a comeback. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted February 17, 2014 Author Share Posted February 17, 2014 Tony, you always get to the nitty-gritty, in an eloquent and unique way. Thank you. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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