dr_con Posted February 3, 2014 Share Posted February 3, 2014 The Breaking Apart Intimate confusions The Future by its own being lacks a syntax avoids grammars Intentions abound A Rose by its nature blooms and pricks biological imperatives generates and destroys Into Romance comes the Rogue Narrative buckling and unbuckling Itinerant swashes charting the uncharted pirating definitions where none should be found Incomprehensible Adventures! The Ocean tamed Stories and their Endings unfurled beneath The Company flag: ‘Ever After’ Irrepressible we grab with all our hearts forgetting Narratives are liars Masters of disguise cloaking the Now in silk scarves agreed upon Fictions Irksome and Impish The World prevails campaigns mostly glorious dashed breaking apart undeniable rocks ship no more simple seed for future corals Impermanence absolute a heart’s break just ecstatic reminder of a nameless tale never to be untold. Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted February 4, 2014 Share Posted February 4, 2014 Never to be untold Not even a "Not be told", but the "untold".....almost prophetic. For something avant-garde, I kinda liked this. ;) agreed upon Fictions Exposing the sad, human condition. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted February 4, 2014 Share Posted February 4, 2014 Doc, as always, your work requires careful study, I always knowing I have missed something but taking pleasure in what I think I understand. Nothing wasted here, and the final stanza captivates. "a nameless tale never to be untold." Indeed. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted February 4, 2014 Author Share Posted February 4, 2014 Thanks! I went to a youth UU con last weekend- I'm a youth advisor at the local church and the them was the arts (specifically music- They called it Conchella) And I took a creative writing workshop offered by a great 16 year old. The 'prompt' I chose was "She was heartbroken." I of course, Dr. Conned it, but this after some editing was that piece. Thanks again for the reviews! Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted February 17, 2014 Share Posted February 17, 2014 "She was heartbroken" -- lacks a syntax avoids grammars -- and she must have been communicating in text message shorthand. Says I still <3 U only the Dr. Con can. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted February 19, 2014 Author Share Posted February 19, 2014 ;-) Tony, as always I deeply appreciate your unique views and that, indeed is deeply humorous and probably an unknowing influence on the final poem! indeed. Many Thanks! J Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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