Benjamin Posted February 9, 2014 Share Posted February 9, 2014 pantheons of imagination locked in ratchet windings of an ancient clock.. a pause.. before the gong bursts forth.. adjusting chronometry of their drudgery and through a fog of halitosis and drink fumes.. lost aspirations the definition of love a resolve to keep one's word morality the only thing that makes human life worth living Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted February 9, 2014 Share Posted February 9, 2014 ...morality... Pulling no punches, huh? The "lost aspirations" part can also hit home, I am sure, to many thinking folks. Loved the use of the word chronometry. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted February 10, 2014 Share Posted February 10, 2014 A bitter, yet lovely piece. It made me smile all the way through. Juris Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted February 10, 2014 Share Posted February 10, 2014 I love the last stanza giving a moral philosophy of life. Your use of "adjusting chronometry" seems oblique to me. May I suggest "measuring chronometry" ??? As always, introspective and related to reality of life. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dedalus Posted February 11, 2014 Share Posted February 11, 2014 Sobering, and rather guilt-inducing! Quote Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted February 11, 2014 Author Share Posted February 11, 2014 Thanks guys. Seeking a universal tone here... I wrestled with "adjust" and will take another look. My intention was to emphasise a boundless (historical) and intangible mentality, geared to short, physical and Earthbound lives. Perhaps... "When ambition exceeds ability the likelihood of success is limited." Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted February 12, 2014 Share Posted February 12, 2014 I love the phrase "chronometry of their drudgery". Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted February 17, 2014 Share Posted February 17, 2014 Morals have to come from somewhere. Perhaps all people, even primitives in a tribe that has never been in contact with anyone else in the world, have an innate sense of right and wrong. If so, how and why? Well, that would be an argument with many sides, but I would suggest instilled by God. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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