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Learning to Calm Down

 

If you want to do this

you have to calm down

and I’m learning Sensei

I’m learning

 

But everything talks to me

when I’m quiet

Sometimes they shout

like in the past life Elementary

 

Boring Boring Boring

 

But I think I was closer then

then and then and then

 

But you said

The problem is thinking

 

And I thought

of dreams from there

stepping into a club

Everything goes quiet

 

I didn’t know then I didn’t know I didn’t

The secret words or signs or signals

in that absolute silence I would remember

How I talked to trees

In the filtered green sunlight

rich with biology they would answer

 

I’m learning to give up the learning

the language of Hey Now

the hustle of jaded neurons

the semiotics of belonging

the grimoires of grammar

 

To remember the language

Of The Before and After

I calmed down.

  • 2 weeks later...
Posted

Great work, Juris. The first line is important. If you want to do this implies that there's a choice. The speaker says he wants it, that he's trying.

 

L18 is inspired and sums up the tone of the entire poem. Perhaps we think we want something, say we want something, say we're trying, even think we're trying, when really it comes down to I didn’t know then I didn’t know I didn’t.

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

Posted

Thanks Tony! I enjoyed writing it and very grateful for the feedback;-)

 

Juris

Posted

"How I talked to trees

 

In the filtered green sunlight

 

rich with biology they would answer"

 

On my nature walks I have always thought the trees and the river, hills, and even fields of corn were talking to me. Thanks for putting me back in special places.

 

Paco

Frank E Gibbard
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Hello good doctor you do not deserve my riposte at all amid your fine philosophy here but I can't resist throwing in a quote from the great BBC comedy Goon Show you may or not be aware of>

"I talk to the trees... that's why they put me away" the writer was an acknowledged mad genius who had been put in hospitals so he was being very ironic. Boring boring could be a quote from that savant from The Simpsons, Homer S. Both great shows.

I admire too your depth of analytical observation and therapeutic postillation. Gets coat, so long. Frank

Posted

Paco & Frank... Thanks to you both for engaging and allowing the piece to invoke delight! Frank I know the rather brilliant Goon Show! Ahh yes, my current/old favorite is the most divine Mighty Boosh - but that truly requires a twist in one's humor circuits;-)

 

Juris

  • 4 weeks later...
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Excellent fare... Most of us are channelled from an early age to exploit our full potential. But to quote John Lennon "Life is what happens while you are busy making other plans." To be satisfied with ones lot (in my view) is to be successful... But how many can claim to be so. :smile: G

Posted

Thanks Geoff for the read! ;-)

 

And the well thought response;-)

 

Juris

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