Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 17, 2009 Share Posted May 17, 2009 What About Us What is making us feel the way we do about one another? What about you? What about me. What about us? Maybe one day we can drift amongst the stars of the night sky. I want to dance on the stars and walk on fire. A flame burns until we douse the raging fire burning within. A passionate kiss is all I need from you. Take my hand and I will show you the world. Follow me to the highest mountain top on this world we do live in. Don’t you know I love you so. Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Lake Posted May 17, 2009 Share Posted May 17, 2009 Larsen, As usual, an easy and passionate read. A flame burns until we douse the raging fire burning within I like these lines. Cheers, Lake Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 17, 2009 Share Posted May 17, 2009 I agree with Lake, Victor. I like the lines she picked out in this lyrical poem. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Larsen M. Callirhoe Posted May 17, 2009 Author Share Posted May 17, 2009 thanks for the replies lake and tony. i lik that line you both pointed out also. i dont believe this is one of my better poems. on another forum called artplop someone pointed out the tense usage. so my work is cut out to improve this poem still. thanks larsen aka victor Quote Larsen M. Callirhoe Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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