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What About Us


Larsen M. Callirhoe
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Larsen M. Callirhoe

What About Us

 

What is making us

feel the way we do

about one another?

 

What about you?

What about me.

What about us?

 

Maybe one day

we can drift

amongst the stars

of the night sky.

 

I want to dance on the stars

and walk on fire.

 

A flame burns until we douse

the raging fire burning within.

 

A passionate kiss

is all I need

from you.

 

Take my hand

and I will show you the world.

 

Follow me to the highest mountain top

on this world we do live in.

 

Don’t you know

I love you so.

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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Larsen,

 

As usual, an easy and passionate read.

 

A flame burns until we douse

the raging fire burning within

 

I like these lines.

 

Cheers,

 

Lake

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

thanks for the replies lake and tony. i lik that line you both pointed out also. i dont believe this is one of my better poems. on another forum called artplop someone pointed out the tense usage. so my work is cut out to improve this poem still.

 

thanks

larsen aka victor

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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