dr_con Posted September 24, 2014 Posted September 24, 2014 @ The Edge a Poet must @ least once __everytime sit stand fidget @ The Edge crying weeping laughing guffawing like the High Priest absolutely focused throat and knife __drunken world weary weight see hear feel touch boundaries between language and nothing @ All Quote thegateless.org
badger11 Posted September 24, 2014 Posted September 24, 2014 Perhaps feel/touch are much the same? Taste/Smell? like the High Priest absolutely focused throat and knife Liked the intensity of that. Liked the form too. Quote
dedalus Posted September 29, 2014 Posted September 29, 2014 I like this. But it doesn't always go that way. Not infrequently, I think I'm a bit of a dozy fool. One has to hit things bang on the nose, with no allowance for six inches left or right .... Quote Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim
Benjamin Posted September 30, 2014 Posted September 30, 2014 They always say that you should write about things of which you know. One needs to have experienced the highs and lows of life to some extent to be sufficiently moved; although I'm surprised at how frequently these days the words 'bi-polar' occur in modern living. I wonder how they would have applied to some poets of the past. Quote
tonyv Posted October 7, 2014 Posted October 7, 2014 I agree with Badger's, Brendan's, and Geoff's insightful remarks. I'll add that in addition to the pleasing form, I think this excels because it's not overloaded with metaphor. That's what makes this priest simile so powerful. It's there, and it's allowed to shine. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic
dr_con Posted October 16, 2014 Author Posted October 16, 2014 Thanks All! I'm in a slump, of sorts- working on other things so poetry is @ a trickle. I much appreciate the feedback- And Badge, hmm, not sure touch is somatic, feel is emotive (to me) will reconsider and change if appropriate. I'm glad my first in awhile was so well received by you wondrous folk! Juris Quote thegateless.org
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