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My songs of apathy


Bloodyday
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Everything is in disarray

My truth is changed for you

My memories are lost nowhere

My songs of love you didn't care

My highway is still in apathy

Everything fades behind my entity

Some puzzle drives me insane

I couldn't crack your mystery

Perhaps you could make it easier

Wish I could embrace you in my sole desire

 

In this way my worthless verses born

They are very lonely without any beauty

My guitar won't cry any melody anymore

If you could watch inside the door

 

Still I sing sitting in darkness

I wish you won't see my face

The face you hate today

Once you loved so hard

You will hear only my song

The song that still wants you so strong!

 

I still find your footsteps

They are still deep in confidence

Wind is bearing your fragrance

of roaming around like you dance

 

 

Perhaps you are the planet

discovered by thousand moons

Or the encrypted signals for the lonely mankind

One interpretation can dismantle the NASA

I couldn’t acclaim my love till then

Knowing my poems sucked up by the black hole!

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The narrator's discombobulation, resulting from his struggle to come to grips with lost love, is painfully evident from the very beginning:

Everything is in disarray

My truth is changed for you

My memories are lost nowhere

My songs of love you didn't care.

His frustration becomes even more apparent where he goes on to write,

My highway is still in apathy

Everything fades behind my entity

Some puzzle drives me insane

I couldn't crack your mystery

and

Still I sing sitting in darkness

I wish you won't see my face

The face you hate today

Once you loved so hard.

His feelings of dejectedness even carry over to how he sees his art:

In this way my worthless verses born

They are very lonely without any beauty.

And though the reader can feel the poet's confusion ("Some puzzle drives me insane"), it, at the end, resolves into this lovely, analytical trope and offers some much needed relief:

Perhaps you are the planet

discovered by thousand moons

Or the encrypted signals for the lonely mankind

One interpretation can dismantle the NASA

I couldn’t acclaim my love till then

Knowing my poems sucked up by the black hole!

I like your "worthless verses" a lot!

 

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O my GOD

 

 

 

Tony.....you have just made an surgical analysis of my poem.....i think all the things kept inside it just got revealed!

 

 

thanks for your excellent comment!

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O my GOD

 

 

 

Tony.....you have just made an surgical analysis of my poem.....i think all the things kept inside it just got revealed!

 

 

thanks for your excellent comment!

 

How's THAT for "armchair psychology"?!? icon_lol.gif I enjoyed this poem a lot, Bloodyday!

 

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Aleksandra

Wow Bloodyday, I see your writing is improved. I love this poem. The expressions are so vivid and original.

I love this line:

My guitar won't cry any melody anymore

 

and also the last stanza is wonderful. sounds so powerful and strong, especially the first two lines in that ending piece:

 

Perhaps you are the planet

discovered by thousand moons

 

and the last line it's so ironical and with meaning in different ways.

 

Knowing my poems sucked up by the black hole!

 

Bloodyday, this poem is much different than the rest of yours. And I loved this one.

 

Keep writing, you are getting much better

 

Thanks for sharing

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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Hi tonyv

 

 

at my age, my armchair fascination would not be liked by the family members, because they love me to smile all over. But your words of armchair psychology is obsessing me like i am sleeping beside the sea!

 

 

your two words tell a lot!

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Hi aleksandra!

 

 

i am trying to set free those people who are bored of my poem h ha ha ha ha 236907.gif

 

 

But there is an objection.....for a long time some of you are not writing! i think there is something to think about!

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Hi Bloodyday,

 

This is the first poem I read from you and I find some expressions are interesting. Beside what Tony and Alek pointed, I think these two lines are bloody good: icon_lol.gif

 

One interpretation can dismantle the NASA

 

Knowing my poems sucked up by the black hole!

 

The former has the NASA, which I read tonight from Tony's poem. The latter echoes the "worthless verses".

 

Cheers,

Lake

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Thanks LaKe

 

Actually i am looking for the parameter which is sucking up my everything.....i am desperate to kill my apathy!

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