douglas Posted November 3, 2014 Share Posted November 3, 2014 I'm terminalBut I'm gratefulI'm past the half way markBut l'm still appreciative SlowlyGraduallyI'm learning that stressIs not worth itOr what it's about Nor is crueltyOr worry or pride or strife Peace and generosity and loveIs what life truly asks of us At the end of the dayAs I count downToward the closingOff of all of thisI realise that the attainment ofBeauty is allThat the soulRequires Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted November 6, 2014 Share Posted November 6, 2014 I like this because it made me feel good on a bad day. Perhaps you could lose the opening "Terminal" though . Apart from overstating the title it makes for a stuttering start to what is an essentially free flowing and enjoyable piece. G. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
douglas Posted November 8, 2014 Author Share Posted November 8, 2014 Thank you Benjamin - and I am glad that it helped to lift you up on a bad day!!!!! In terms of the suggestion - it was just a repeat of the title when I cut and pasted the poem in - I have removed it though - ;) Quote To receive love, you have to give it... Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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