Benjamin Posted December 2, 2014 Share Posted December 2, 2014 original a frightened animal wail rouses me to consciousness and through its captive anguish my heart quickens with concern that I'm unable to help outside a dimension where the séance of sleep gives life to some long dead memory-- an ectoplasm conjured up from the darkness rounded corners of a room that vies with imagination for solidarity-- until I gently nudge her awake version 2 her frightened animal wail rouses me to consciousness and through its captive anguish my heart quickens with concern that I'm unable to help outside a dimension where the séance of sleep gives life to some long dead memory-- an ectoplasm of fear risen from darkness rounded corners of the room that vies with natures sanctuary for a re-incarnation-- I gently nudge her awake Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted January 22, 2015 Share Posted January 22, 2015 The title drew me in on this one, a time when most people are asleep except for those who are haunted and those who do the haunting. And then there are animals, and the wind, and other night sounds. I think it's a lonely time and am relieved that the speaker has someone whom to nudge awake. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted January 28, 2015 Author Share Posted January 28, 2015 Thanks Tony. My wife's occasional vivid nightmares have a profound effect on this simple loving soul. The nudge... to release her (and me) from terrible audible torment. G. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
fdelano Posted January 28, 2015 Share Posted January 28, 2015 Hi, Geoff. This emotional experience is all too familiar to me, except it's me moaning and thrashing about, disturbing the night. After so many years, and a lessening of sleep torture, all my wife has to do is touch my shoulder to bring me back to the present. What a perfect description is "darkness rounded corners of the room." Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Randver Askmadr Posted January 29, 2015 Share Posted January 29, 2015 I think I like the original best. Although both are good. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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