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silently

and in the dark I row

till at last the hull slides into mud

ebb tide strains through reeds that whisper conversations

with the angry tones of nearby trees

and I creep ashore past

where the dead

walk in the dead of night

and refuse to leave their blessed earth

though life is for the living of.. I mouth a prayer

to remain safe and anonymous

but very soon they'll know

that I'm here

 

 

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silently

and in the dark I row

till at last the hull slides into mud

ebb tide streams through wavering reeds that exchange

their tones of whispers with nearby trees

and I creep ashore past

where the dead

walk in the dead of night

and refuse to leave their blessed earth

though life is for the living of.. I mouth a prayer

to remain safe and anonymous

but very soon they'll know

that I'm here

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An experiment of metaphor and ambiguity simply written. A dream work even, that could relate to antiquity: Odysseus in the land of the dead maybe, or an invader intent on displacing indigenous culture... or perhaps even a modern illegal alien. Then again it could be just contemplation of the real and the intangible. The nature of death... and paranoia in a maelstrom of thoughts that pass through a mind from both past and present. I like your use of the word "eerie" for it is well suited to this short piece. Thanks for looking in Tony. Best wishes, Geoff.

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angry tones of nearby trees

 

Poe, Lovecraft, Serling, King.....MOVE OVER! Loved that line.

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ebb tide streams through reeds that converse

with the whisper of nearby trees

 

Enjoyed B. In the eerie context would it be a thought to tone down the 'angry' ?

 

all the best

 

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Yes, it was eerie ... but it opened up any number of possibilities!

Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim

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