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Electric Light Behind Closed Doors


dedalus
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He sits in a pool of lamplight by the door
with telephone gripped between hand and knee,
waiting for the damned thing to ring.

On a table at his other side
lies the crumpled telegram:
"It is with deep regret I write to inform you ...."

Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim

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David W. Parsley

Hi Bren, I admire the sensation of dread and isolation, the narrator stranded on an island of lamplight. Far from home.

 

Thanks,

- Dave

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Lamplight? Telegram? A WW2 piece? Father at home waiting for news of the son? Stark scene but emotionally filled.

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A parent/? with a telegram from the government/? bearing bad news, possibly, the death or injury of a son or daughter? It sounds grim and the pool of lamplight plus the telephone makes it worse. This was written as a mood piece covering the opening stage of a possibly continuing tale of horror. On the other hand, he might have just failed his driving test!,

Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim

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Mood well met! Very clever and you're driver's test comment made me laugh.

 

Well done Bren!

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