dedalus Posted May 29, 2015 Share Posted May 29, 2015 He sits in a pool of lamplight by the doorwith telephone gripped between hand and knee,waiting for the damned thing to ring.On a table at his other sidelies the crumpled telegram:"It is with deep regret I write to inform you ...." Quote Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted May 31, 2015 Share Posted May 31, 2015 Hi Bren, I admire the sensation of dread and isolation, the narrator stranded on an island of lamplight. Far from home. Thanks, - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted June 1, 2015 Share Posted June 1, 2015 Lamplight? Telegram? A WW2 piece? Father at home waiting for news of the son? Stark scene but emotionally filled. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dedalus Posted June 1, 2015 Author Share Posted June 1, 2015 A parent/? with a telegram from the government/? bearing bad news, possibly, the death or injury of a son or daughter? It sounds grim and the pool of lamplight plus the telephone makes it worse. This was written as a mood piece covering the opening stage of a possibly continuing tale of horror. On the other hand, he might have just failed his driving test!, Quote Drown your sorrows in drink, by all means, but the real sorrows can swim Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted June 2, 2015 Share Posted June 2, 2015 Mood well met! Very clever and you're driver's test comment made me laugh. Well done Bren! Quote thegateless.org Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted June 4, 2015 Share Posted June 4, 2015 Stylishly ambiguous and what more can I say that has not already been said. G. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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