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Wintersong (Haiku)


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(Encouraged by Golden)

1

gray skies

croaking ravens

darken the backyard

 

2

winter sun

brighter than summer

spring in icicle drops

 

3

piercing wind

on my window sills

dried boxelder bugs

 

4

in the stillness

winding up the hill

unknown footprints

 

5

after the girl left

a feeling of loss

creeps in

 

6

cold night, in the

humming of the furnace

garage doors screech

 

7

in the darkness

computer screen blinks

with twinkling stars

 

8

winter morning

the car’s headlight -

the first light of daybreak

 

9

missing the stop sign

missing the stop

police car’s behind

 

10

record low-

this cold

even in my bosom

 

 

(Hope there's one that works. icon_smile.gif )

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goldenlangur

Hello Lake,

 

You've got an impressive collection of haiku here with wonderful images.

 

Love the contrasts in the 'gray skies' and the 'ravens' in the first haiku. Similarly the final image in No. 3 is quite startling. My favourites are Nos. 4, 7. 8 and the haunting 10.

 

Thank you for an inspirational read.

 

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Aleksandra

1,2,7, are definitely my favorite in this collection of yours Lake. Very good job, and wonderful effort. All haikus have its own story, and I like them all.

 

Well done

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

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goldenlangur

Hi again Lake,

 

Your wonderful collection of haiku and your recent thoughts about the 'turn' in this form and its challenges gave me an idea - perhaps we could try a haiku exercise roughly like this :

 

For a whole week we try to write a collection of haiku which includes the reference November or autumn eg:

 

after the rain

crows fly in a line -

November dusk

 

Perhaps we call it a haiku challenge? What do you think?

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Larsen M. Callirhoe

oh wow lake love the imagery in your series of haikus. this one is my favorite number seven but i enjoyed them all. number seven was perfect at capturing this series truth and elogance.

 

larsen

Larsen M. Callirhoe

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goldenlangur wrote:

perhaps we could try a haiku exercise roughly like this :

 

For a whole week we try to write a collection of haiku which includes the reference
November or autumn
eg:

 

after the rain

crows fly in a line -

November
dusk

 

Perhaps we call it a haiku challenge? What do you think?

 

That'll be a great idea! Each time, we'll have a different theme to write about. But you have to make a start so that others can follow. icon_biggrin.png

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My favorite

 

winter sun

brighter than summer

spring in icicle drops

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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I remember this series of haiku, Lake. Winter imagery is my favorite of all -- perfect title, btw! -- and the imagery you employ, along with its logical progression, is sublime. I wish I wrote this one.

 

Tony

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goldenlangur

Hello again Lake,

 

Lake wrote:

 

That'll be a great idea! Each time, we'll have a different theme to write about. But you have to make a start so that others can follow.
icon_biggrin.png

 

So glad the idea appealed to you - inspired by your own haiku in the forum icon_smile.gif and so let's try it. I will start it as a new topic and we can all post our haiku collection for the week - 16 - 23 November on this thread and of course comment and exchange ideas and thoughts.

 

goldenlangur

 

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goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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