eclipse Posted September 30, 2015 Share Posted September 30, 2015 The night scattered my lover andthe stars like confetti, beauty caughther, autumn winds brought the lastembers from the summer sun. Naturetests it's brush with a shade from herauburn hair making the tangerine mist declarea different hue. My dearest's eyes are paintedinto the windows of the night previewingher ravishing gaze until it becomes asatellite shared with the world then raisedto the stars.Winter takes her symmetry asher eyes shimmer through his mask reachingsummer who pines for a landscape redefined,but fingers cannot reach flakes of snow, wintersings it's frosty climes as my beloved climbs beauty'svine. The soft winds of spring stroke the vine to reveal her grace, four seasons construct a palace, in the single pane she is a blend of each-colors merge, snow floats on the yellow tides of summer. My suitor becomes a fifth season, the guide to five winds that blow against my heart. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
poetjohncompton Posted October 11, 2015 Share Posted October 11, 2015 its so flowing and beautiful. vivid too. nicely done! Quote misterpoet Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
eclipse Posted October 19, 2015 Author Share Posted October 19, 2015 thank you Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted November 2, 2015 Share Posted November 2, 2015 Barry, the force that moves this poem is a passion somewhat reminiscent of Neruda. The weaving of seasons together is pleasing and unforced, nice variation on a theme as old as poetry itself. I applaud the care in avoiding repetitions, the originality of phrasing. Nice! - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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