JoelJosol Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 Taking unknown turns slam like a heavy foot on the brake pedal. What if I had misplaced my map and my liters of diesel were not good enough? You have taken me into one of those turns. I won't get off your track. Just be there at the next turn. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
goldenlangur Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 Hello JoelJosol, Your poem suggests so many things - a possible actual journey to an unfamiliar destination - the details 'misplaced my map' and 'my liters of disel were not good enough' are wonderfully concrete. Then in the second half of the poem you address the 'you' who has led the poet on this journey and here the poem suggests trepidation as they embark on a relationship? goldenlangur Quote goldenlangur Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 19, 2009 Author Share Posted May 19, 2009 Rocky relationship? :-) Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 I, too, love this part -- ... What if I had misplaced my map and my liters of diesel were not good enough? -- and I agree with Golden's observation re the imagery. At the end of the poem, the narrator remains unsure about the situation, but, nevertheless, self-assured: You have taken me into one of those turns. I won't get off your track. Just be there at the next turn. The adrenalin rush brought on by the feeling of uncertainty excites me. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
JoelJosol Posted May 19, 2009 Author Share Posted May 19, 2009 I'm glad that you felt the tension, Tony. Quote "Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Aleksandra Posted May 19, 2009 Share Posted May 19, 2009 Ah Joel, I like this poem a lot. Very intensive. Very loud expressions and strong. Each part gives each meaning. The poem is compact and well charged with power. Much enjoyed. Aleksandra Quote The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau History of Macedonia Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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