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My Diary


JoelJosol
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is cycles of fragments,

reflected like mirrors

of clouds, water over water

pushing forward towards water,

lost in a crowd of aggregation,

thousand details and choices

to look for. No wonder,

the breeze keeps pushing away

the present picture,

like clouds that never settle

in one place. They group and re-group

like false memory whose pieces

are from different puzzles.

In the end, they get recorded

like Egyptian history.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Frank E Gibbard

And the hyroglyphs tell their story pictorially like your diary but in words. Exercises the mind Joel.

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Aleksandra

No wonder,

the breeze keeps pushing away

the present picture,

like clouds that never settle

in one place.

 

Joel wonderful expressions, wonderful. I loved the quoted part of your poem. It gives original imagery and very clever written.

 

Ending part is amazing, and gives even deeper sense of the poem.

 

I'm happy when I read poem like this one.

 

Thank you for sharing.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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I also like the part that Alek mentioned. In addition to that, I feel that your Egyptian history simile adds an air of vanity. As is the case with the pyramids being recognized as the marvels of architecture that they are, the diary entries are recorded. Yet, like the pyramids, they also seem to ask, "What was it all worth?"

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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goldenlangur

Hello JoelJosol,

 

 

I like how the hectic fullness of the diary hints at an underlying niggling sense of emptiness.

 

 

goldenlangur

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Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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