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Concrete

 

Who will

answer

The Door?

 

I had forgotten

The Concrete Men

were coming today

despite evidence

of Muscular Machines

Sidewalk Symbols Weeds

in Cracks lush in rebellion against Flat

 

Other things had slipped my mind

I blamed it on a Dharma talk

Listening listening to correct

my sitting dropping everything

bit by bit but Bedeviled-Self Himself

stubbornly launches

Hungry Ghosts from The Pit

 

It helped so I thought

And that was a problem

I could drop Sephiroth Qliphoth

Orisha and Lwa Buddhas and

Bodhisattvas Techniums and Ancestors

Up and Down You but not damn Karma

Knots of Me interrupted hearing

Engine clang the elemental Stone on Metal

Fire pumping through gears and other

technical abstractions to produce Fluid

motion echoes of which travels through

Air to reach me on my cushion

Damn I think interrupted again

This isn’t Reality a travesty

Of discipline maybe if

I hid in the woods

atop a mountain

ancient so it moves slowly

I’d get it

I’d get IT

 

Expecting a knock

Arising see

stairs upturned

being reduced to its aggregate

gravel rocks sand bound by cement

each distinct pebble shining

a Deep History before birth

past death a congress of Elder Gods

who when turned to dust

will not be the memory of Wife’s icy fall

or the sensation of limping carrying

too many groceries or eagerness promised

by overly stuffed suitcases and bags

these spirits were never Stairs

might as well call them Stars as Blake

did seeing them for what they are

 

Hearing knock

heading for door

wondering who will answer?

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The first time I read this I just went through the motion of its musicality. Looked for keywords to tie them together. I thought here is someone whose reflection/meditation was interrupted :-) The strong internal rhymes and enjambment pulled me to the next one until the end. Enjoyed this, dr_con.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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abstrect-christ

Interesting read Con. I got a contemplation piece out of it asking who laid the foundation for the narrater and which part of him/her is going to answer a call.

Pinhead

"Unbearable, isn't it? The suffering of strangers, the agony of friends.

There is a secret song at the center of the world, Joey, and its sound is like razors through flesh."

Joey

"I don't believe you."

Pinhead

"Oh come, you can hear its faint echo right now. I'm here to turn up the volume.

To press the stinking face of humanity into the dark blood of its own secret heart."

"There's a starving beast inside my chest
playing with me until he's bored
Then, slowly burying his tusks in my flesh
crawling his way out he rips open old wounds

When I reach for the knife placed on the bedside table
its blade reflects my determined face
to plant it in my chest
and carve a hole so deep it snaps my veins

Hollow me out, I want to feel empty"
-- "Being Able To Feel Nothing" by Oathbreaker

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=aBPy3xNwwL8

"Sky turns to a deeper grey

the sun fades by the moon

hell's come from the distant hills

tortures dreams of the doomed

and they pray, yet they prey

and they pray, still they prey"
-- "Still They Prey" by Cough

https://soundcloud.com/relapserecords/sets/cough-still-they-pray

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It is so great to see your name and have the privilege to read your verses and comments. I have been gone for a time.

 

As to this verse- I have read it multiple times and each time I get a clearer picture. I know little to nothing about meditation and had no idea to whom or what your were referencing in V4L3,4,5.( not because you were not clear but because of what I do not know, I will however research these things). I did type in" Dharma talk" into the all famous Google. I opened a site called dharmaseed.org and listened to a talk entitled "What I can control/what I can't control" by JoAnna Harper. I did this primarily to help me understand why these talks would cause one to forget something. I wanted to better understand your verse. I think I got the gist or at least a gist. If I get IT all wrong please feel free to tell me.

 

Meditation is a practice that is designed to put us in touch with the "universe" and help us gain inner peace and clearness of mind, which, if done correctly and consistently allows us to be "better" than we are. Reaching that ultimate place is a life long journey toward an un-arrivable destination. On the journey we experience interruptions. How they effect us can be determined by the "level" of peace and understanding we have achieved.

 

You spoke of finding a more suitable place to help you "get it", the woods or a mountain top. While this would be a nice retreat it is not life for most of us. I would think the point is to achieve inner peace in the midst of chaos. A calmness that we take with us into the world in which we live.

 

I take your first line both situationally and figuratively. In any given situation, when disruption invades our life, how will respond. "Who will Answer the Door?"

 

Sorry to have been so verbose. However, it was your verse that spawned all this thinking :-8).​

 

thanks for sharing

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Thanks, JJ, Abstrect, RG. Much appreciate your comments and thoughts and love it when Verbose happens;-) Appreciate the feedback, and indeed I think you all 'Got it.' And thanks AC for pointing out the 'Foundations.' Indeed that was what the poem was about, but I missed the literal Metaphor of Concrete Foundation and the 'foundation' of practice. Love it when a Reader, sees past what I do;-)

 

Much Appreciation!

 

con/jur/d

thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules.

 

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