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My world comes crushing down

But I still sit behind

Trying to listen to the breeze

Passing me by

 

Waiting for the dawn and

perhaps the rain

lonely day I embrace a lot

my miseries wanton

 

yesterday you were beautiful

having same shiny face

expecting a baby and a new smile

is it a dream or a reality for me?

 

Tasting my tears salty all the same

May be tomorrow

Or the life after another

I will play the game wise…….

 

 

 

I am still in melancholy!

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goldenlangur

Hi RoNy,

 

 

Laden with the anguish of a broken heart, this poem! Not even nature in all its guises - 'breeze, rain, dawn' can give any respite. You capture the pain well. But I like how you end with the hope that perhaps tomorrow will be different;

 

May be tomorrow

Or the life after another

I will play the game wise…

 

 

 

I hope so, my friend.

 

 

goldenlangur

 

 

 

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goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Rony,

 

This poem has such a raw feeling.

 

Life goes on, tomorrow will be better.

 

All the best,

 

Lake

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Aleksandra

I like this heartbreaking poem Rony. Your melancholy can be seen through your poem. You should remember that everything what is happening, it is for a reason. God knows what he do. Look up to the next morning, not that you are going to play wise only, but because God always have something else for us, after some storm.

 

Keep your faith and be positive. And also keep your writing, that always helps.

 

I liked your poem a lot, Rony.

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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'Yesterday'. That's a heavy word in this poem, BD.

"Words are not things, and yet they are not non-things either." - Ann Lauterbach

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Hi Rony,

 

The title works well. It led me to believe the poem would be positive, but there's only a glimmer of hope, and that's in the last line.

 

Yes, Maybe tomorrow ...

 

 

Here's an old one of mine ... for you.

 

 

Rx

 

The summer doesn't miss

the spring

 

it is what it is:

it's its own

 

Perhaps it's okay to hide

for awhile, invisible

like winter in the middle

of July

 

Maybe goodbye would

be okay

 

maybe today

 

 

 

Good to see you. Things will get better!

 

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Hi TonyV

 

i know things will change, but don't when! perhaps it takes so long and this matter is taking the test of my temper and patience.

 

But your poem is the example of excellent piece of work.

 

The summer doesn't miss

the spring

 

this line shows the inevitability of the regular causality of rationalism and it has a certain time frame to accomplish. nice instance.

 

it is what it is:

it's its own

 

then it follows with a rhythmic line and expression depicted as a "Long time issue" of our known world.

 

Perhaps it's okay to hide

for awhile, invisible

like winter in the middle

of July

 

but this regular option offers some options to live in alternative way of escapism from the thing one wants but depression strikes as one couldn't get it which is also a regular phenomena of nature and only few people can get it, perhaps.

 

Maybe goodbye would

be okay

 

maybe today

 

may be in frustration or not, decision comes for everybody's good but it possesses some grim which strikes a lot.

 

in a nutshell, all the excellent verses touch my mind......

 

 

thanks for your beautiful creation!

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hi goldenlangur

 

 

we lead a life of great certainty and we come to understand when something hurts. i remember a song of REM titled as Everybody hearts.

 

ya, i think this worthless optimism will drives me further to live on.

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Hi Lake

 

thanks for your optimistic comment and i wish you were true!

 

 

but i don't know when it comes...................

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Hi Aleksandra

 

 

Nice thoughts, but one question: can everybody forget the feelings he felt very deep?

 

 

i know we need to compromise, but some issues can't be resolved and i know GOD is a mighty player, ofcourse!

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Hi joel

 

how heavy it is........i think physics can't answer !!!!!!

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Aleksandra
Hi Aleksandra

 

 

Nice thoughts, but one question: can everybody forget the feelings he felt very deep?

 

 

i know we need to compromise, but some issues can't be resolved and i know GOD is a mighty player, ofcourse!

 

The answer is - Never. You can't forget ever Rony, but for sure, the power of the feelings, or the power ofthe pain what someone feel in the moment would be powerfulness. It wont hurts this much. For that, you need to help too, with faith and looking forward for a new light.

 

I think even now, you sound better and less sad, am I right?

 

ALeksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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I think even now, you sound better and less sad, am I right?

 

 

i tried to catch it out.....nice vacation i enjoyed (Eid Ul Azha), some more vacations to come (our day of Independence 16 th December, 25th December, our national election 29th December),but still i don't know what i am doing. sometimes i like to take revenge sometimes i forbid myself to do wrong.

 

the definition of mental disorder, i don't know, but trying to recover. you are right....i won't forget the memories and perhaps these are the memories which byte like snake every time.

 

Thanx for your nice answer, Alek!

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Bloodyday wrote:

 

how heavy it is........i think physics can't answer !!!!!!

 

That's a cute answer. icon_biggrin.png

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welcome TonyV

 

Lake

 

cute is the haiku

cute is the question

cuter is nothing

but feel like you, man! icon_biggrin.png

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