dcmarti1 Posted December 24, 2016 Share Posted December 24, 2016 (There are allusion to the Gnostic myths of creation and the multiple emanations of the "Unknown God". I am just in that place right now.) When 1 is 3 or 5 or 10, and when 1 is 4 or 12 or 24, and when a tin of apple mango tea is the only color in a white kitchen, and when a sole pink flamingo stands embedded in dying, brown grass, and when the neighbor's lighted head of Christ with Thorns twinkles next to a crèche with Santa, you realize you belong nowhere. When 1 is 3 or 5 or 10, and when 1 is 4 or 12 or 24, and when your non-existent cat refuses her name of Barbelo, and when a liturgy that you like but certainly do not believe gives you the same comfort that in former times came from the glory hole that reeked of liquids surely not wine, you realize you belong nowhere. When 1 is 3 or 5 or 10, and when 1 is 4 or 12 or 24, and when the Jews and Atheists you would spend Christmas with are spread out some 2 thousand miles, and when the mystics you'll never meet can't help you put a patient back into the wheelchair from which they've fallen, and when the decorations are put away, you realize you belong somewhere. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Benjamin Posted December 29, 2016 Share Posted December 29, 2016 Evocative stuff. I found myself thinking of the creation myth of Pandora and Hope (or expectation). How the conglomerate effect of each subsequent small act of human kindness and goodwill has the ability to shape the future.. And of the frustration that lurks in our threescore years and ten. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted January 2, 2017 Share Posted January 2, 2017 Hi Marty, Brilliant images, great use of repetition, and a piece of your soul. What more could one ask for in a poem. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dr_con Posted January 4, 2017 Share Posted January 4, 2017 Agree with the above. Indeed a wonderful Gnostic, Kabbalah, Zen insight. And yes a piece of your soul, indeed. Brilliant! Juris Quote thegateless.org Come on over and check out my poetry substack y'all;-) Or if your bored, head to the Zazzle store: https://www.zazzle.com/store/gateless. If you buy anything I lose a bet, so consider that before you violate the digital rules. Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted January 6, 2017 Author Share Posted January 6, 2017 Thank you for the kind critique. And happy new year. Hi Marty, Brilliant images, great use of repetition, and a piece of your soul. What more could one ask for in a poem.~~Tink Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted January 6, 2017 Author Share Posted January 6, 2017 I am listening to an audio CD course on gnosticism. It aided me in getting an image. Agree with the above. Indeed a wonderful Gnostic, Kabbalah, Zen insight. And yes a piece of your soul, indeed. Brilliant! Juris Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
David W. Parsley Posted January 16, 2017 Share Posted January 16, 2017 Hi Marty, I feel safe in asserting that the poet is back! I was moved to witness the "piece of your soul" that haunts the steps of this startlingly composed and well-crafted poem. I like the subtle music of the stanza movement, the echo of internal rhymes. No student of Gnosticism (yet), the numerology left me a little uncertain of message, but the feel of it was pronounced and lent an intense unity to the poem's growing, well, suspense! Nice work, - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
dcmarti1 Posted January 16, 2017 Author Share Posted January 16, 2017 Thank you. I am "kind of" back. The numbers deal with the myths about the emanations from the Invisible God, the Unknowable God. I'll leave you with that teaser. Look into the Gnosticism CD or DVD from TheGreatCourses.com Hi Marty, I feel safe in asserting that the poet is back! I was moved to witness the "piece of your soul" that haunts the steps of this startlingly composed and well-crafted poem. I like the subtle music of the stanza movement, the echo of internal rhymes. No student of Gnosticism (yet), the numerology left me a little uncertain of message, but the feel of it was pronounced and lent an intense unity to the poem's growing, well, suspense! Nice work, - Dave Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted March 6, 2017 Share Posted March 6, 2017 This is impressive work, Marti. It throws religion (and the lack thereof), philosophy, mystery, and kitsch into a blender and concocts something eerily ... human! Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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