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Their is a ladder of my shadows

reaching the moon as I am laid

in earth, they lower his heart

placing it in my chest and I am allowed

to walk amongst the living whose

spirits walk on the moon contained

within this heart.

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David W. Parsley

Great start to this one, Barry. For me it falls a little off-rail starting with "I am allowed.." But what an image: "ladder of my shadows"! How about something more like, "I see the last rung touch the moon as I am laid..."? Just a thought.

 

All the Best,

- Dave

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Interesting surreal incarnation. Unusual choice re: “his heart” in that many of the most well-known lunar deities are female; although male lunar gods are also frequent. Also really like "ladder of my shadows". The piece is open to interpretation and there are people who believe that alien life forms exist on the dark side of the moon :-) Enjoyed.. although you might want to change that first word to “There”.

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  • 2 weeks later...

Barry, I wish I could tap into my muse to write word art like this. I love the imagery in this piece. And yes "ladder of my shadows" beautiful.

​Note: There not Their I know with spell check these things often get over looked, but . . .

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