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His call

 

In the full moon

a mountain of clouds rise

from the blue belly

of the valley.

 

Tonight, with Orion in abeyance

she borrows his cincture,

his sword for her diadem;

and she plunges

the nebula of the galaxy.

 

Her song fills the hills,

but no butter-lamp is lit,

his flute lies silent,

and his rice bowl empty.

 

She has heard his call

where is he?

 

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Ooooh Here is a departure from the usual. But it still has the golden langur moment.

 

And what a surprise this one carried.

 

golden langur wrote:

 

Tonight, with Orion in abeyance

she borrows his cincture,

his sword for her diadem;

and she plunges

the nebula of the galaxy.

 

How do you know all of these words? "cincture" is a new one for me...

 

I really enjoyed this one.

 

~~Tink

~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~

For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com

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goldenlangur

Hi Tink,

 

Thank you for your witty response to this. I'm pleased that you enjoyed the images of sacred office in the part you've quoted.

 

Yes, a departure from the tanka and haibun forms I normally seem to go for but glad that it works in some way.

 

As for those "words", having fallen from grace, perhaps I ought to know icon_wink.gif

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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Aleksandra

Wonderful expressions goldenlangur. I like it so much. The start of the poem sounds so good and gives a lots of beautiful imageries:

 

In the full moon

a mountain of clouds rise

from the blue belly

of the valley.

 

This expression I loved so much:

 

Her song fills the hills

I love that style of expression - not usual.

 

And the end:

She has heard his call

where is he?

 

impress me a lot, because I have seen in your poems a lot, question in the last part. And I love that way of ending parts.

 

Thank you for sharing my friend

 

Aleksandra

The poet is a liar who always speaks the truth - Jean Cocteau

History of Macedonia

 

 

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goldenlangur

Hi Alexsandra,

 

 

You're quite right - so many question but what hope for any answers? I'm so pleased that you enjoyed this short piece on the oracle tradition here.

 

Thank you very much for your words of encouragement.

 

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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For some reason I was expecting "him" to be a person -- I dunno ... perhaps I was thinking of my own predictable verse icon_lol.gif -- and I was delighted to read on and find out that "he" was Orion. I, too, had to look up three words in this one (abeyance, cincture, and diadem), but I like that! These words fit the poem very well.

 

Love this part:

Her song fills the hills,

but no butter-lamp is lit,

his flute lies silent,

and his rice bowl empty

... and the emphasis on the word "where" in the last line. An enjoyable read, as always, GL!

 

Tony

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goldenlangur

Hi Tony,

 

 

I'm very happy for your to read the "he" here as Orion, as this constellation is associated with the oracle tradition here.

 

I'm delighted that you enjoyed the images and the theme here.

 

 

The words you've picked out were inspired by the oracular rites.

 

 

Many thanks for the read and your thumbs-up!

 

goldenlangur

goldenlangur

 

 

Even a single enemy is too many and a thousand friends too few - Bhutanese saying.

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