eclipse Posted February 27, 2017 Share Posted February 27, 2017 The moon was buried in an unmarked sky wearingmy face, soldiers trained ghosts not to haunt thosewhose identity's had been displaced. Moving throughvillages winter seemed to lose its sense of self, tastingthe cold it's shaking hands held the dead.As soldiers advanced the night walked backwards withholes in its boots, those children saved parachutedthrough cavities. The day called for commitment,measurement, for the ascent of ideals; and of transfiguration.I heard hungry trees near the desert talking about becomingladders to the clouds to taste the rain, the desert spoke ofraising insurgent sandmen to ride horses to prise the moonfrom the teeth of the wolf; two lots of blood, dust and sand,ideologies intermingled strand by strand.I was held by an image of a map of this land in the glass ofheavens door falling through space, its trajectory correspondswith ours as we move beyond solace. Quote Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
Tinker Posted March 1, 2017 Share Posted March 1, 2017 Hi Barry, Love the imagery in this, it serves up one rich line after another. It reads like a sonnet. (with a few extra lines) I like it. ~~Tink Quote ~~ © ~~ Poems by Judi Van Gorder ~~ For permission to use this work you can write to Tinker1111@icloud.com Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
tonyv Posted March 6, 2017 Share Posted March 6, 2017 I love poems with the names of places for titles. This one is especially provocative -- "syria" -- and I anticipated chaos. What I found instead was balanced turmoil, commotion tempered by an unexpected order where ... soldiers trained ghosts not to haunt thosewhose identities had been displaced ... -- and where even the "hungry trees near the desert" were considering collaboration. The distillate for this reader: an imminent emergence. Tony Quote Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic Link to comment Share on other sites More sharing options...
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