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Terry L shuff

The pages so old,

Too fragile for fingers to touch.

Her secrets , still safe.         

                      Senryu

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Terry L shuff

I see that.  more Basho original   thanks

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Yes, Terry, from back in the days of the honor system when one could trust that another probably would not read something as personal as his diary (book). Unfortunately, these days I'll have to opt for an encrypted file on my computer and smartphone.

Tony

Here is a link to an index of my works on this site: tonyv's Member Archive topic

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Hello Tony  , I encryped my android, a while back,   maybe hacking will become come an Olympic sport

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  • 2 weeks later...
David W. Parsley

Theme lends itself well to senryu with its brevity and apparent transparency, wit.  (A purist might demure that it does not imply a season of the year, but modern treatments have moved away from that "requirement" mostly.)  I endorse Badger's further contraction as being in concert with the form's movement generally and your topic specifically.  If you wish to preserve the classic 5-7-5 syllable pattern, you might also consider something like:

  The pages have aged

  Crumble for browsing fingers

  Her secrets are safe

I like this poem!  Thanks for sharing.

- Dave

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